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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think host country should welcome cultural differences Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think host country should welcome cultural differences v. 3
In the present day situation, the peoples interest in flying to other countries is increasing at more than an expected rate due to many reasons, most likely, education, tourism etc. This essay will discuss whether one travelling to another country should adopt their cultures or the host countries should allow practicing the cultures of the visitors. The famous saying "when you are in Rome be like a Roman", has a greater influence towards cultivating the cultures. Basically, the language becomes one of the greatest barriers to survival, even though we have enough wealth in our pockets. Moving to other cities in search of jobs and education, we will find only a handsome of people when compared to the residents. For example, the food habits are very diversified across the continents, the lifestyle will be mainly dependent on the environmental behaviour. According to the Darwins theory, " the fittest survives", has a pretty good connection for adapting the cultural behaviour of the destination country. On the other hand, a strict rule of not allowing the non-residents to practice their way of life is not a good decision to make. Due to this prohibition, the country may lack visitors and recognition, as a result, it would affect the fame of the country. Even though, humans are well known for their adaptive nature, they couldn't even leave their culture behind. For instance, when it comes to belief in God, one cannot insist others to practise the religion that the residents are following because this will be against the Human rights. In my perception, the destination countries should allow practising their own cultures, will even more increase the interest of people migrate to such countries. Thus, this essay had discussed on the either sides of the topic and my own opinion is also presented.
In the present day situation, the peoples interest in flying to
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other
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countries
is increasing at more than an
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expected
rate due to
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many
reasons, most likely, education, tourism etc. This essay will discuss whether one travelling to another
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country
should adopt their
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cultures
or the host
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countries
should
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allow
practicing the
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cultures
of the visitors.

The
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famous
saying
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"
when you are in Rome be like a Roman
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, has a greater influence towards cultivating the
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cultures
.
Basically
, the language becomes one of the greatest barriers to survival,
even though
we have
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enough
wealth in our pockets. Moving to
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other
cities in search of jobs and education, we will find
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only
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a handsome of
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people
when compared to the residents.
For example
, the food habits are
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very
diversified across the continents, the lifestyle will be
mainly
dependent on the environmental
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behaviour
. According to the
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Darwins
theory,
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"
the fittest survives
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"
, has a pretty
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good
connection for adapting the cultural
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behaviour
of the destination country.

On the
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other
hand, a strict
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rule
of not allowing the non-residents to practice their way of life is not a
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good
decision to
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make
. Due to this prohibition, the
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country
may lack visitors and recognition,
as a result
, it would affect the fame of the
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country
.
Even though
, humans are well known for their adaptive nature, they couldn't even
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leave
their
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culture
behind.
For instance
, when it
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comes
to belief in God, one cannot insist others to
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practise
the religion that the residents are following
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because
this will be against the Human rights.

In my perception, the destination
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countries
should
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allow
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practising
their
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own
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cultures
, will even more increase the interest of
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people
migrate to such
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countries
.
Thus
, this essay had discussed on the either sides of the topic and my
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own
opinion is
also
presented.
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Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think host country should welcome cultural differences v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
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