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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. v.11

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. v. 11
It is noticeable that people tend to travel more frequently these days than they used to do in the past. While I agree that the travellers should follow the host country’s traditions and cultures, I also think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. On one hand, travellers should adapt to the culture of their host country and feel happy with the idea of trying new things. Nowadays, people not only consider travelling as a way to relax but also they think it is a chance for self-improvement and exploring the world. Travelling is a good opportunity to try new things such as traditional cuisine, music and customs and those who just travel to view landscapes waste a perfect chance to learn something new. For example, people who have visited places like India, Egypt or China have been very excited when they tried the local food or wore the traditional dress. An experience like this broadens people’s horizons and enriches their knowledge. On the other hand, for many reasons the host country should accept and understand the different backgrounds of tourists. Firstly, for many visitors, it would be difficult to follow the host culture and customs because these usually different than their own and in some cases they may even be incompatible with their beliefs and morals. For example, Indian or Arabs who go to European countries may find it difficult to get used to the European taste in food because it does not contain as much spices as they have in their food. In addition, if travellers feel they are welcomed in the new country despite the cultural differences they will feel more comfortable to visit this place again. In conclusion, I believe that it could be beneficial for travellers to get exposed to different cultures and customs. However, tourist destinations should be opened to the cultural diversity of its newcomers.
It is noticeable that
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people
tend to travel more
frequently
these days than they
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used
to do in the past. While I
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agree
that the
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travellers
should follow the
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host
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country’s
traditions and
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cultures
, I
also
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think
that the
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host
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country
should welcome cultural differences.

On one hand,
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travellers
should adapt to the
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culture
of their
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host
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country
and feel happy with the
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idea
of trying
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new
things. Nowadays,
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people
not
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only
consider travelling as a way to relax
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but
also
they
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think
it is a chance for self-improvement and exploring the world. Travelling is a
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good
opportunity to try
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new
things such as traditional cuisine, music and customs and those who
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just
travel to view landscapes waste a perfect chance to learn something
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new
.
For example
,
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people
who have visited places like India, Egypt or China have been
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very
excited when they tried the local food or wore the traditional dress. An experience like this broadens
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people’s
horizons and enriches their knowledge.

On the other hand
, for
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many
reasons the
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host
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country
should accept and understand the
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different
backgrounds of tourists.
Firstly
, for
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many
visitors, it would be difficult to follow the
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host
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culture
and customs
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because
these
usually
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different
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than
their
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own
and in
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some
cases they may even be incompatible with their beliefs and morals.
For example
, Indian or Arabs who go to European
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countries
may find it difficult to
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get
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used
to the European taste in food
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because
it does not contain as
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much
spices as they have in their food.
In addition
, if
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travellers
feel they
are welcomed
in the
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new
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country
despite the cultural differences they will feel more comfortable to visit this place again.

In conclusion
, I believe that it could be beneficial for
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travellers
to
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get
exposed to
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different
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cultures
and customs.
However
, tourist destinations should
be opened
to the cultural diversity of its newcomers.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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