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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.3

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. v. 3
It is argued that people should follow local customs and behaviour while they visited a foreign country. On the other hand, others believe that tourists should be welcomed by the people of the host country. I will discuss both views in this essay. To begin with, the people of the host country think that new cultures and behaviour of the tourists can make threaten for their cultures. They also believe that people may be interested in other cultures and they can forget their local customs. For instance, a new style of wearing clothes or new foods would developed instead of their traditional ones. Some Islamic countries have a prohibition on clothes and food such as alcohol are prohibited in many countries. Hence, the people of host country think that visitors should follow local customs and traditions. By contrast, some people believe that people should respect tourists and welcome them in their society. Tourism helps people to represent their cultures and traditions worldwide. People and government should be flexible to the visitors to develop tourist industry. Tourism not only represent cultures, but also create a field of employability. For example, tourism is becoming more popular among young people to work as a tourist guide. If the people of a host country do not respect their tourist after that they should lose their tourist from the tourist destination. So, people should cordially welcome new visitors in their locality. To sum up, tourist has always met with new customs and traditions of a new country. I personally think that people of a host country should accept their visitors with respect and they can follow ideal styles and cultures of the tourist which do not make any violation with their traditions.
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is argued
that
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people
should follow local customs and
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behaviour
while they visited a foreign
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country
.
On the other hand
, others believe that
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tourists
should
be welcomed
by the
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people
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host
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country
. I will discuss both views in this essay.

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begin
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people
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country
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think
that
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new
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cultures
and
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behaviour
of the
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tourists
can
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make
threaten for their
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cultures
. They
also
believe that
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people
may
be interested
in other
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cultures and
they can forget their local customs.
For instance
, a
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new
style of wearing clothes or
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new
foods would
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developed
instead
of their traditional ones.
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Some
Islamic
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countries
have a prohibition on clothes and food such as alcohol
are prohibited
in
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many
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countries
.
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, the
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people
of
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host
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country
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think
that
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visitors
should follow local customs and traditions.

By contrast,
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some
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people
believe that
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people
should respect
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tourists
and welcome them in their society. Tourism
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helps
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people
to represent their
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cultures
and traditions worldwide.
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People
and
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government
should be flexible to the
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visitors
to develop
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tourist
industry. Tourism not
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only
represent
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cultures
,
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but
also
create a field of employability.
For example
, tourism is becoming more popular among young
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people
to work as a
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tourist
guide. If the
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people
of a
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host
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country
do not respect their
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tourist
after that they should lose their
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tourist
from the
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tourist
destination.
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So
,
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people
should
cordially
welcome
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new
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visitors
in their locality.

To sum up,
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tourist
has always met with
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new
customs and traditions of a
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new
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country
. I
personally
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think
that
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people
of a
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host
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country
should accept their
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visitors
with
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respect and
they can follow ideal styles and
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cultures
of the
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tourist
which do not
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make
any violation with their traditions.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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