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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences v.2

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences v. 2
It is often said that at the present time, more juveniles are seeing obese by people in the developed nations. Behind this various reasons and its effect. THIS ISSUE CREATING A MORE PROBLEM FOR THEIR HOME COUNTRIES. THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS ABOUT HOW EATING MORE FAST FOODS AND LESS PHYSICAL ACTIVITY LEADS TO VARIOUS HELATH PROBLEMS AND AFFECTS THE ECONOMY OF THAT COUNTRY. TO START WITH VARIOUS CAUSES, FIRST AND FOR MOST REASON OF AN OBESITY IS THE EATING HABITS OF THE TODAY'S GENERATION. TO ELABORATE, NOWADAYS, CHILDREN ARE EATING MORE OUTSIDE OR STREET FOOD LIKE, BURGER, SANDWICH, PIZZAS ETC. BECAUSE THIS FOOD VARITIES ARE HIGH IN PROTEIN AND FAT, IT IS VERY HEAVY FOR THE CHILDREN BODY TO DIGEST AS REQUIRE BY THE BODY. FOR AN EXAMPLE, MY AUNT'S SON HE IS A 2 YEAR OLD AND HAS WEIGHT IS FAR MORE THAN HIS AGE. DUE TO HIUS FREQUENT EATING HABITS HIS WEIGHT IS KEEPS ON INCREASING DAY BY DAY THAN REDUCING. THUS THIS KIND OF HABITS MAKES CHILD OVERWEIGHT. ON THE SAME SIDE, THIS PROBLEM HAVE SEVERAL EFFECTS ON AN INDIVIDUAL AS WELL AS GOVERNMENT. THE PRIME EFFECT IS THAT OFFSPRINGS MIGHT DEVEOLOP SERIOUS HEALTH PROBLEMS LIKE, DIABETES, CHOLESTEROL, HEART PROBLEMS. THIS IS DUE TO THE POOR QUALITY FOOD INTAKE. FOR AN INSTANCE, ONE OF THE MEDICAL SURVEY IN THE INDIA SAYS THAT ALL STREET FOOD ARE MADE I LOWER QUALITY OILS WHICH ARE DANGEROUS FOR THE HUMAN BODY. THUS AS THIS EFEECT CONSIDER AS MAJOR EFFECT OF AN OBESITY. TO SUM UP, IT IS SAYS THAT EVERYTHINGS HAS ITS AFFECTS ON OTHER THINGS IN THE SAME WAY, OBESITY ALSO HAS AN NUMEROUS EFFECTS AND REASONS. THIS CAN BE OVERCOME BY AN INDIVIDUAL AND AUTHORITY EFFORTS.
It is
often
said that at the present time, more juveniles are seeing obese by
people
in the developed nations. Behind this various reasons and its
effect
. THIS ISSUE CREATING A MORE
PROBLEM
FOR THEIR HOME COUNTRIES. THIS ESSAY WILL
DISCUSS ABOUT HOW
EATING
MORE
FAST
FOODS
AND LESS PHYSICAL ACTIVITY LEADS TO VARIOUS
HELATH
PROBLEMS
AND AFFECTS THE ECONOMY OF THAT COUNTRY.

TO
START
WITH VARIOUS CAUSES,
FIRST
AND FOR MOST REASON OF AN OBESITY IS THE
EATING
HABITS OF THE
TODAY
'S GENERATION. TO ELABORATE, NOWADAYS, CHILDREN ARE
EATING
MORE OUTSIDE OR STREET
FOOD
LIKE, BURGER, SANDWICH, PIZZAS ETC.
BECAUSE
THIS
FOOD
VARITIES
ARE HIGH IN PROTEIN AND
FAT
, IT IS
VERY
HEAVY FOR THE CHILDREN BODY TO DIGEST AS REQUIRE BY THE BODY. FOR AN EXAMPLE, MY AUNT'S SON HE IS A
2 YEAR
OLD
AND HAS WEIGHT IS FAR MORE THAN HIS AGE. DUE TO
HIUS
FREQUENT
EATING
HABITS HIS WEIGHT IS
KEEPS
ON INCREASING DAY BY DAY THAN REDUCING.
THUS
THIS KIND OF HABITS
MAKES
CHILD OVERWEIGHT.

ON THE SAME SIDE, THIS
PROBLEM
HAVE SEVERAL EFFECTS ON AN INDIVIDUAL
AS WELL
AS
GOVERNMENT
. THE PRIME
EFFECT
IS THAT
OFFSPRINGS
MIGHT
DEVEOLOP
SERIOUS HEALTH
PROBLEMS
LIKE, DIABETES, CHOLESTEROL, HEART
PROBLEMS
. THIS IS DUE TO THE POOR QUALITY
FOOD
INTAKE. FOR AN INSTANCE, ONE OF THE MEDICAL SURVEY IN THE INDIA SAYS THAT ALL STREET
FOOD
ARE MADE
I LOWER QUALITY OILS WHICH ARE
DANGEROUS
FOR THE HUMAN BODY.
THUS
AS THIS
EFEECT
CONSIDER AS MAJOR
EFFECT
OF AN OBESITY.

TO SUM UP, IT IS SAYS THAT
EVERYTHINGS
HAS ITS AFFECTS ON OTHER THINGS
IN THE SAME WAY
, OBESITY
ALSO
HAS AN NUMEROUS EFFECTS AND REASONS. THIS CAN
BE OVERCOME
BY AN INDIVIDUAL AND AUTHORITY EFFORTS.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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