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ome people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measure are required. Discuss both these views and give your o v.2

ome people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measure are required. 2
some masses consider that the value perspective to better public health is mushrooming by plenty sport aabilities. Thus, others believe that this might nearly effect on body either they have need more than other things. This essay would throw some light an all aspects to see things in the right way. It is unquestionably true that health plays a vital role in human being life without health diet this is not possible to live on the earth. In addition, in these days youth have always like junk food. For instance, burger, pizza, oily, spicy, italian and so many other things. In facts, youngster can not consciousness about their home-made stuff or they always curious about any new restaurants but sometimes many place could not hygienic so they have providing unhealthy food. As far as there are causing plethora diseases such as low pressure, obesity, high pressure, anxiety and extra. Moving towards, it is true that outdoor activities have very good impact on body because they playing a lot of games like cricket, tennis, badminton, football, yoga, running, basketball and so on. when teenagers could play the sport in every day. However, they can choose their career in this field and they are superb influence of their life. Otherwise, adolescent have hectic schedule in their life so further they never doing any games. After that, adults should need exercise and healthy diet. Lastly, masses can spend their time own self than they do some exercise on the gym. Then, They can not face any illness in their life. All said and done, I reckon, health is significant part of life. Thus, people can eat home-made food either it is good on body. They are every day doing some exercise or they might always fit and health.
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some
masses consider that the value perspective to better public
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health
is mushrooming by
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plenty
sport
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aabilities
.
Thus
, others believe that this

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might
nearly
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effect
on body either they have need more than other things. This essay would throw
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some
light an all
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aspects
to
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see
things in the right way.

It is
unquestionably
true that
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health
plays a vital role in human being
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life
without
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health
diet this is not possible to
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live
on the earth.
In addition
, in these
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days
youth have always like junk food.
For instance
, burger, pizza, oily, spicy,
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italian
and
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so
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many
other things. In facts, youngster can not consciousness about their home-made
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stuff or
they always curious about any new restaurants
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but
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sometimes
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many place
could not hygienic
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so
they have providing unhealthy food. As far as there are causing plethora diseases such as low pressure, obesity, high pressure,

anxiety and extra.

Moving towards, it is true that outdoor activities have
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very
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good
impact on body
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because
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they playing
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a lot of
games like cricket, tennis,

badminton, football, yoga, running, basketball and
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so
on. when
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teenagers
could play the sport in every day.
However
, they can choose their career in this
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field and
they are superb influence of their
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life
.
Otherwise
, adolescent have hectic schedule in their
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life
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so
further
Did you mean "they're never doing", "they are never doing", or "they were never doing"?
they never doing
any games. After that, adults should need exercise and healthy diet.
Lastly
, masses can spend their time
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own
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self
than they do
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some


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exercise
on the gym. Then, They can not face any illness in their life.

All said and done, I reckon,
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health
is significant part of
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life
.
Thus
,
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people
can eat home-made food either it is
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good
on body. They are every day doing
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some
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exercise or
they might always fit and
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health
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes
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IELTS essay ome people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measure are required. 2

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
295 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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