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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? v.5

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? v. 5
It is argued that in today's modern civilization people's use to prefer starting their own business, despite been working as a servant of others in an organization, they don't want to be enslaved by their bosses. Besides that, there are a lot of drawbacks of having or starting your own business. First of all, starting yours self entity requires an adequate amount of investment to bring up your business up to some extent level in the market. Being a competitor, is not an easy task and one should have to work hard and put all of the efforts into it, in order to thrive in the modern environment of entities. For Example, if someone's is the owner of the business and don't put any of the new digital strategies to increase the data analytics and productivity, then this business may have to suffer from consequences somewhere may be in the future. That's why it is important to select the type of business strategies which are more modernized and enduring. Secondly, failing in finding the perfect employees for your business may escalate the problems and rather then increase in the margin of the profits, all goes into the loss. In the other words, they went to go bankrupt, if they are holding a huge debt. To conclude, I reckoned that to strive your own business requires modern digitalised business strategy. Apart, from that people don't want to work for someone because employers are now being under the criticism of exploiting employees
It
is argued
that in
today
's modern civilization
people
's
use to
prefer starting their
own
business
, despite been working as a servant of others in an organization, they don't want to
be enslaved
by their bosses.
Besides
that, there are
a lot of
drawbacks of having or starting your
own
business.

First of all
, starting yours self entity requires an adequate amount of investment to bring up your
business
up to
some
extent level in the market. Being a competitor, is not an easy task and one should
have to
work
hard
and put
all of the
efforts into it, in order to thrive in the modern environment of entities.

For Example
, if someone's is the owner of the
business
and don't put any of the new digital strategies to increase the data analytics and productivity, then this
business
may
have to
suffer from consequences somewhere may be in the future. That's why it is
important
to select the type of
business
strategies which are more modernized and enduring.

Secondly
, failing in finding the perfect employees for your
business
may escalate the problems and
rather
then
increase in the margin of the profits, all goes into the loss. In the other words, they went to go bankrupt, if they are holding a huge debt.

To conclude
, I reckoned that to strive your
own
business
requires modern
digitalised
business
strategy. Apart, from that
people
don't want to work for someone
because
employers are
now
being under the criticism of exploiting employees
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? v. 5

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