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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? v.18

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? v. 18
At present, various people are working for themselves instead of working for a company or corporation. In my opinion, this is because it gets easier to establish a company than ever. Yet, the main disadvantage of being self-employed is having to take all the responsibilities related to business. It is the fact that it gets more readily for us to create our companies by ourselves. In many countries, to establish our companies all we have to do is just take several steps including filling out documents with a little money. For example, in Japan, there has been no minimum for capital since 2005 when the new law related to business was enacted. Also, global markets are open to us, as the Internet becomes prevalent around the world. Thus; wherever we are, we can do business with everybody, using the Internet, which facilitates establishing our companies with fewer people or by ourselves. Being self-employed, we have to take all the responsibilities associated with our own business. When working for ourselves, our income is completely dependent on ourselves and directly reflects how much we make profits. This can lead to long hours of work, which harm our health. Perhaps, we may be admitted to the hospital due to working hard. In this case, there are no benefits in helping our lives because of being self-employed. For instance, when I was a child, my father who ran the restaurant got sick from working hard and during its closing, our family experienced a hard time on account of lack of money. In conclusion, people would like to be self-employed workers since they have less difficulty establishing their own companies. However, being self-employed has the major drawback in a way that all the blames related to their companies has to be taken by themselves.
At present, various
people
are
working
for themselves
instead
of
working
for a
company
or corporation. In my opinion, this is
because
it
gets
easier to establish a
company
than ever.
Yet
, the main disadvantage of being self-employed is having to take all the responsibilities related to business.

It is the fact that it
gets
more
readily
for us to create our
companies
by ourselves. In
many
countries, to establish our
companies
all we
have to
do is
just
take several steps including filling out documents with a
little
money.
For example
, in Japan, there has been no minimum for capital since 2005 when the new law related to business
was enacted
.
Also
, global markets are open to us, as the Internet becomes prevalent around the world.
Thus
; wherever we are, we can do business with everybody, using the Internet, which facilitates establishing our
companies
with fewer
people
or by ourselves.

Being self-employed, we
have to
take all the responsibilities associated with our
own
business. When
working
for ourselves, our income is completely dependent on ourselves and
directly
reflects how much we
make
profits. This can lead to long hours of work, which harm our health. Perhaps, we may
be admitted
to the hospital due to
working
hard
.
In this case
, there are no benefits in helping our
lives
because
of being self-employed.
For instance
, when I was a child, my father who ran the restaurant
got
sick from
working
hard
and during its closing, our family experienced a
hard
time on account of lack of money.

In conclusion
,
people
would like to be self-employed workers since they have less difficulty establishing their
own
companies
.
However
, being self-employed has the major drawback in a way that all the blames related to their
companies
has to
be taken
by themselves.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? v. 18

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  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
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