Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? v.16

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? v. 16
As the world's job market is getting tougher to secure a position, self-employment is gaining more and more momentum every year. While many people are self-employed and people are willing to become one as well, however, it can be tricky for some with no idea of being one's own boss. I will further discuss it in details the reasons and disadvantages of self employment. As we know that people are hard to work with and company policies can be really confusing as well as annoying for many which leads people to start their own business. Whereas some people just can't work under any due to their rebellious nature forcing them to get work for themselves. Another factor leading to increase in self-employment over the years is the reduction in job vacancies which increases the competition for a job vacancy. This forces people to start making opportunities for themselves and go towards self-employment. So are there any disadvantages of being a self-employed? Yes, self employment does come with some disadvantages as well. One of the disadvantages of being own boss is people grow to get lazy because of being their own boss. For example, self-employed people sometimes get up late and tends to do things slowly due to no restrictions on them. Moreover, owning a business leads to increase in expenses and taxes of the business owner as in the beginning they are unable to keep proper records of their spendings. In conclusion, the mindset of starting own business will keep rising due to saturating job market. Although, being employed by ourself has many advantages but the disadvantages cannot be ignored and should be keep it mind as they can reduce the joys of being a business owner easily.
As the world's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
market is getting tougher to secure a position, self-employment is gaining more and more momentum every year. While
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are self-employed and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are willing to become one
as well
,
however
, it can be tricky for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
with no
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of being one's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
boss. I will
further
discuss it in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
the reasons and disadvantages of self employment.

As we know that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to work with and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
policies can be
really
confusing
as well
as annoying for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
which leads
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
. Whereas
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
can't work under any due to their rebellious nature forcing them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
work for themselves. Another factor leading to increase in self-employment over the years is the reduction in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
vacancies which increases the competition for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
vacancy.
Did you mean "these"?
This
forces
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
making opportunities for themselves and go towards self-employment.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
are there any disadvantages of being
Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
a self-employed
? Yes, self employment does
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
disadvantages
as well
. One of the disadvantages of being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
boss is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
grow to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
lazy
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of being their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
boss.
For example
, self-employed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
up late and tends to do things
slowly
due to no restrictions on them.
Moreover
, owning a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
leads to increase in expenses and taxes of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
owner as in the beginning they are unable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
proper records of their
Possible spelling mistake found.
spendings
.

In conclusion
, the mindset of starting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
rising due to saturating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
market. Although,
being employed
by
The term is non-standard and not widely accepted.
ourself
has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
advantages
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the disadvantages cannot be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignored
and should be
Did you mean "kept"?
keep
it mind as they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the joys of being a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
owner
easily
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts