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In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. <br> What do you think are the causes of this? <br> What solutions can you suggest? v.6

In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. <br> What do you think are the causes of this? <br> What solutions can you suggest? v. 6
Aggressive student behaviour is a major cause of concern in many countries. This article addresses the reasons behind such behaviour and the measures that can be taken to prevent it. Violent student behaviour can be attributed to a bad family atmosphere, a competitive school environment and lifestyle/dietary habits. A student’s behaviour in society depends upon the atmosphere at his/her home. If the parents of student don not devote enough time for him/her, the adolescent mind goes wayward. Research and study have shown that major acts of violence were committed by people who have had abusive mother or father in their childhood. Another factor that influences student behaviour is the environment at school. A competitive and comparison-based education structure adds fuel to fire. The last but less acknowledged factor in violent behaviour is their lifestyle/dietary habits. Excess meat consumption and lack of adequate physical exercise results in an unhealthy body and mind which leads to violent acts. The behaviour of a student reflects the society we live in. Although violent student behaviour is a matter of grave concern, there are adequate and simple measures to prevent it. Parents and teachers must devote enough time for the student and understand his/her strengths and weaknesses. They must never compare one student with another. A great deal of emphasis must be placed by schools in physical activities like swimming, running and other sports. These help to channelize the great energy of the students in a better manner. Students should also be encouraged to take up activities like gardening and caring for domestic animals. These help in providing opportunities for them to appreciate nature and the other living creatures on this planet. Violent student behaviour, although on the rise, can be purged at the grass-root level if proper preventive measures are taken. The youth are the future of our society and it is our solemn duty to guide and make them compassionate human beings.
Aggressive
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student
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behaviour
is a major cause of concern in
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many
countries. This article addresses the reasons behind such
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behaviour
and the measures that can
be taken
to
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prevent
it.

Violent
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student
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behaviour
can
be attributed
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bad
family atmosphere, a competitive school environment and lifestyle/dietary habits. A
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student’s
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behaviour
in society depends upon the atmosphere at his/her home. If the parents of
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student
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don not
devote
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enough
time for him/her, the adolescent mind goes wayward. Research and study have shown that major acts of violence
were committed
by
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people
who have had abusive mother or father in their childhood. Another factor that influences
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student
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behaviour
is the environment at school. A competitive and comparison-based education structure
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adds
fuel to fire. The last
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but
less acknowledged factor in violent
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behaviour
is their lifestyle/dietary habits. Excess meat consumption and lack of adequate physical exercise results in an unhealthy body and mind which leads to violent acts.

The
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behaviour
of a
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student
reflects the society we
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live
in. Although violent
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student
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behaviour
is a matter of grave concern, there are adequate and simple measures to
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prevent
it. Parents and teachers
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must
devote
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enough
time for the
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student
and understand his/her strengths and weaknesses. They
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must
never compare one
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student
with another. A great deal of emphasis
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must
be placed
by schools in physical activities like swimming, running and other sports. These
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help
to channelize the great energy of the
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students
in a better manner.
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Students
should
also
be encouraged
to take up activities like gardening and caring for domestic animals. These
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help
in providing opportunities for them to appreciate nature and the other living creatures on this planet.

Violent
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student
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behaviour
, although on the rise, can
be purged
at the grass-root level if proper preventive measures
are taken
. The youth
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are
the future of our society and it is our solemn duty to guide and
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make
them compassionate human beings.
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IELTS essay In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. <br> What do you think are the causes of this? <br> What solutions can you suggest? v. 6

Essay
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4 paragraphs
319 words
5.5
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