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In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v.1

In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1
Nowadays, student’s behaviours is an issue in schools. In many nations learning institutes have major problems with the student attitudes and behaviours. This essay will discuss certain reasons of this issue and also some ways to tackle it. There are several reasons of student’s problematic behaviours in schools. To begin with, teachers are not strict during the classroom time. In most countries, they react normal and do not show harsh response to the student’s disturbing attitude in schools. This, in turn, leads to the students possessing and fostering problematic and bad behaviours as they do not receive strict and daunting response from their teachers. A recent study from Oxford University, for instance, showed that teachers behaving softly with students contribute 50% to the unethical manners of students. Another reason is that students who do not like a specific course may react unethically in schools. Most of the learners are being pushed toward learning all subjects by the learning institutes, without considering their interests in a subject. This, in turn, makes their behavior to become disturbing as they feel stressful while studying a subject and may react inappropriately. However, there are certain solutions to mitigate this problem. Firstly, teachers should adopt strict behaviours in the classroom environment. This is because when students will notice the harsh attitudes of their teacher, they would hardly react in a bad manner. In other words, problematic students, despite their disturbing behavior would not disturb the classroom environment as they would fear from their teacher’s reaction. Secondly, students ought to be given the choice of learning what they want to learn. If students are allowed to learn subjects only, which they like, they would feel a sense of satisfaction and would behave appropriately in schools as they would enjoy learning and their behaviours would not be disturbing. Research by the World Education Organization, for example, revealed that when children in the 8th grade, in China, are allowed to learn their favorite subjects only, their disturbing behaviours become significantly dropped. In conclusion, student’s behaviours is a problem in the education system in many schools in different countries. In my opinion, teachers soft attitudes and students having no interest in a subject are two reasons behind this issue; whereas, strict behaviours of teachers and allowing learners to learn their favorite subjects are the solutions to this problem.
Nowadays,
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schools
. In
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many
nations
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learning
institutes have major
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problems
with the
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student
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attitudes
and
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behaviours
. This essay will discuss certain
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reasons
of this issue and
also
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some
ways to tackle it.

There are several
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reasons
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behaviours
in
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schools
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begin
with,
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teachers
are not
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strict
during the classroom time. In most countries, they
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react
normal and do not
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show
harsh response to the
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student’s
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disturbing
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attitude
in
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schools
. This, in turn, leads to the
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students
possessing and fostering problematic and
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bad
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behaviours
as they do not receive
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strict
and daunting response from their
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teachers
. A recent study from Oxford University,
for instance
,
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showed
that
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teachers
behaving
softly
with
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students
contribute 50% to the unethical manners of
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students
. Another
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reason
is that
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students
who do not like a specific course may
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react
unethically
in
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schools
. Most of the learners are
being pushed
toward
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learning
all
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subjects
by the
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learning
institutes, without considering their interests in a
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subject
. This, in turn,
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makes
their behavior to become
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disturbing
as they feel stressful while studying a
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subject
and may
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react
inappropriately
.

However
, there are certain solutions to mitigate this
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problem
.
Firstly
,
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teachers
should adopt
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strict
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behaviours
in the classroom environment. This is
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because
when
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students
will notice the harsh
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attitudes
of their
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teacher
, they would hardly
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react
in a
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bad
manner.
In other words
, problematic
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students
, despite their
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disturbing
behavior would not disturb the classroom environment as they would fear from their
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teacher’s
reaction.
Secondly
,
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students
ought to be
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given
the choice of
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learning
what they want to
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learn
. If
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students
are
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allowed
to
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learn
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subjects
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only
, which they like, they would feel a sense of satisfaction and would behave
appropriately
in
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schools
as they would enjoy
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learning
and their
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behaviours
would not be
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disturbing
. Research by the World Education Organization,
for example
, revealed that when children in the 8th grade, in China, are
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allowed
to
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learn
their favorite
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subjects
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only
, their
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disturbing
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behaviours
become
significantly
dropped.

In conclusion
,
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behaviours
is a
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problem
in the education system in
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many
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schools
in
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different
countries. In my opinion,
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teachers
soft
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attitudes
and
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students
having no interest in a
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subject
are two
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reasons
behind this issue; whereas,
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strict
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behaviours
of
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teachers
and allowing learners to
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learn
their favorite
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subjects
are the solutions to this
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problem
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
69Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
389 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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