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The diagram shows rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town v.2

The diagram shows rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town v. 2
The diagram illustrates how an Australian town collects rainwater to process in order to use as drinking water. Overall, rainwater collected from the rooftops has to be processed by chemical and filtered, before it can be used as drinking water. Initially, the rain which falls on the rooftop is collected by the gutter and then runs down the pipe at the side of the house into the drain located under the ground. Each houses collect rainwater in such a way and passed along underground drains to the water filter. The water filter removes any impurities and the water once filtered continues to flow into the storage tank for further processing. From this point, the water flows from the storage to the water treatment tank. Chemical added to the water for purification in order to make it fit for consumption. Once water is treated and made ready for drinking, it travels along the pipes that lead back to houses where people can use it for daily consumption.
The diagram illustrates how an Australian town collects rainwater to process in order to
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use
as drinking
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water
.
Overall
, rainwater collected from the rooftops
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has to
be processed
by chemical and filtered,
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before
it can be
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used
as drinking water.

Initially
, the rain which falls on the rooftop
is collected
by the gutter and then runs down the pipe at the side of the
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house
into the drain located under the ground.
'Each', 'every', 'either' and 'neither' are used with singular. Did you mean "all"?
Each
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houses
collect rainwater in such a way and passed along underground drains to the
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water
filter.

The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
filter removes any impurities and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
once filtered continues to flow into the storage tank for
further
processing. From this point, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
flows from the storage to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
treatment tank. Chemical
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added
to the
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water
for purification in order to
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make
it fit for consumption. Once
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water
is treated
and made ready for drinking, it travels along the pipes that lead back to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
where
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people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it for daily consumption.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram shows rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
166 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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