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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.12

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. v. 12
Thanks to the faster transportation and higher salary, travelling aboard is not uncommon for people. There has been a debate about whether travellers should cater to local culture or locals would accept the cultural shock. From my point of view, cultural differences should never be the obstacle of travelling and communication. It is clear to see why some people insist that guests need to learn the local culture. Being prepared before going to another country can help people not only to acquire new knowledge and to broaden horizon but also to avoid being in danger. The differences in laws and regulations between two countries are dramatic. The traffic laws, for instance, are totally different between China and Australia since drivers sit in left and drive in right on the stress in China, but vice verse in Australia. It is easy for a Chinese driver to cause a tragedy because of his ignorance of the Australian situation. In this case, people need to obey the local rules completely. On the other hand, local citizens should better embrace the culture lag bringing with the foreigners because it will exist forever unless the concept of ‘country’ is eliminated. It is too hard to adjust to a new and fresh environment without any previous influence in behaviours and thoughts. To show respect and hospitality, the hosts need to understand and welcome variety. About the issue, both sides can hold water. In my perspective, the disadvantages of travelling after mastering a foreign culture overweight its advantages. Actually, it may damage the local economy which might be benefited from the tourist industry. People from other countries would change their destinations if they have an unfriendly feeling from local residents. In addition, taking a long time to be familiar with all rules and customs would kill the interest. In this way, fewer travellers will come to boom the development. In conclusion, it is worthwhile to take considerations in both ways to stimulate international travelling. Only through opening minds and accepting conflicts can people in the country earn as many profits as possible.
Thanks to the faster transportation and higher salary,
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travelling
aboard is not uncommon for
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people
. There has been a debate about whether
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travellers
should cater to
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local
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culture
or
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locals
would accept the cultural shock. From my point of view, cultural differences should never be the obstacle of
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travelling
and communication.

It is
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clear
to
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see
why
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some
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people
insist that guests need to learn the
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local
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culture
.
Being prepared
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before
going to another
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country
can
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help
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people
not
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only
to acquire new knowledge and to broaden horizon
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but
also
to avoid being in
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danger
. The differences in laws and regulations between two
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countries
are dramatic. The traffic laws,
for instance
, are
totally
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different
between China and Australia since drivers sit in
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left
and drive in right on the
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stress
in China,
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but
vice verse in Australia. It is easy for a Chinese driver to cause a tragedy
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because
of his ignorance of the Australian situation.
In this case
,
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people
need to obey the
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local
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rules
completely.

On the other hand
,
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local
citizens should better embrace the
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culture
lag bringing with the foreigners
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because
it will exist forever unless the concept of
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‘country’
is eliminated
. It is too
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hard
to adjust to a new and fresh environment without any previous influence in
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behaviours
and thoughts. To
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show
respect and hospitality, the hosts need to understand and welcome variety.

About the issue, both sides can hold water. In my perspective, the disadvantages of
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travelling
after mastering a foreign
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culture
overweight its advantages. Actually, it may damage the
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local
economy which might
be benefited
from the tourist industry.
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People
from other
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countries
would
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change
their destinations if they have an
unfriendly
feeling from
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local
residents.
In addition
, taking a long time to be familiar with all
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rules
and customs would kill the interest. In this way, fewer
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travellers
will
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come
to boom the development.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
conclusion, it is worthwhile to take considerations in both ways to stimulate international
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travelling
.
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Only
through opening minds and accepting conflicts can
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people
in the
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country
earn as
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many
profits as possible.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. v. 12

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
345 words
5.5
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