Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task and presents a clear opinion, but some arguments could be developed further. The conclusion summarizes the main points but lacks a strong final thought.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is appropriate but lacks variety and sophistication. There are instances of repetition and some inaccuracies in word choice.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear argument with a logical structure, but some ideas could be better connected. The flow between sentences and paragraphs is generally good, but there are moments where transitions could be improved.
Grammatical Range
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures, but there are errors in sentence construction and punctuation that affect clarity.