Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task but does not fully develop the argument. Some points are underexplored, and the conclusion is weak.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and contains several spelling errors. There is an attempt to use topic-related vocabulary, but it lacks precision and variety.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear argument but lacks logical flow and organization. Ideas are not always well-connected, leading to some confusion.
Grammatical Range
There are numerous grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement and punctuation issues. The sentence structures are mostly simple, lacking complexity.