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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish Why do you think this is happening What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced v.2

Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish Why do you think this is happening What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced v. 2
These days, almost countries produce the big amount of garbage every year, which detrimentally affect the enviroment. The main reason for this situation is behavioural people, therefore governments have to find some solutions to solve this problem. In modern life, people produce more and more rubbish, because they consume more goods than in the past. This lead to many bottles, cans and packages that are thrown away. Eventually, the amount of rubbish is increasing and most people are not aware of this situation. Moreover, wasting also contributes to create garbage. For example, many families buy many foods but they cannot use all the foods or they remove something they are using to buy some new things they like. The main second reason is change in people’s thinking. They like convenience so they will prioritize to use something once and thrown it away such as plastic bags. The bags are trash that causes environmental polution. There are some solutions governments should do to reduce the amount of garbage. Firstly, governments need to raise awareness of rubbish in the general public. Children should be educated about environment and adults need to know how to consume products efficiently. Furthermore, governments should encourage citizens to use recycled products to protect environment. In conclusion, the amount of rubbish is a problem governments are considering. However, if everyone realises some solutions, the problem would be solved.
These days, almost countries produce the
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big
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amount
of garbage every year, which
detrimentally
affect the
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enviroment
. The main reason for this situation is
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behavioural
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people
,
therefore
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governments
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have to
find
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some
solutions to solve this problem.

In modern life,
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people
produce more and more
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rubbish
,
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because
they consume more
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goods
than in the past. This lead to
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many
bottles, cans and packages that
are thrown
away.
Eventually
, the
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amount
of
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rubbish
is increasing and most
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people
are not aware of this situation.
Moreover
, wasting
also
contributes to create garbage.
For example
,
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many
families
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buy
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many
foods
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but
they cannot
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use
all the
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foods or
they remove something they are using to
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buy
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some
new things they like. The main second reason is
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change
in
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people’s
thinking. They like convenience
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so
they will prioritize to
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use
something once and thrown it away such as plastic bags. The bags are trash that causes environmental
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polution
.

There are
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some
solutions
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governments
should do to
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reduce
the
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amount
of garbage.
Firstly
,
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governments
need to raise awareness of
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rubbish
in the
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general public
. Children should
be educated
about environment and adults need to know how to consume products
efficiently
.
Furthermore
,
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governments
should encourage citizens to
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use
recycled products to protect environment.

In conclusion
, the
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amount
of
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rubbish
is a problem
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governments
are considering.
However
, if everyone
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realises
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some
solutions, the problem would
be solved
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS letter Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish Why do you think this is happening What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced v. 2

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  American English
4 paragraphs
230 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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