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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our times is the loss of particular species plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems v.2

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our times is the loss of particular species plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems v. 2
It is argued that the extinction of certain kinds of species such as plants and animals is the major environmental problems. While others think that other environmental issues are more critical. I will discuss both views in this essay. To begin with, plants and animals retain balance environment in the world. If they died out of the world the environment faces many difficulties. For instance, the earthworm is called the plough of the farmer. The earthworm living under the soil and keep fertile, which help farmers to grow more crops. If it's extinct from the soil than farmer needs to use chemical fertilizers and create impact badly on the environment. Hence, loss of some kinds of plants and animals increases the environmental problems. On the other hand, there are so many significant environmental problems as like global warming and pollution. The average temperature of the world is increasing day by day. After that the North Pole glaciers are melting and raising the sea level and flooding lower places. Another major problem such as air pollution, water pollution, sound pollution etc. Air pollution can cause respiratory disease and skin disease such as asthma. For example, WHO estimated in 2007 that air pollution causes a half million people deaths per year in India. So, there are many reasons for the environmental problems. To sum up, loses of certain plants and animals not only major cause of environmental problems but also it includes more problems. To prevent environmental problems people all over the world needs to work to save plants and animals along with preventing different pollutions
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is argued
that the extinction of certain kinds of species such as
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plants
and
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animals
is the major
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environmental
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problems
.
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others
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think
that other
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environmental
issues are more critical. I will discuss both views in this essay.

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begin
with,
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plants
and
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animals
retain balance environment in the
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world
.
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If
they
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died
out of the
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world
the environment faces
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many
difficulties.
For instance
, the earthworm
is called
the
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plough
of the farmer. The earthworm living under the soil and
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keep
fertile, which
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help
farmers to grow more crops. If it's extinct from the soil than farmer needs to
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use
chemical fertilizers and create impact
badly
on the environment.
Hence
, loss of
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some
kinds of
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plants
and
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animals
increases the
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environmental
problems.

On the other hand
, there are
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so
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many
significant
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environmental
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problems
as like global warming and
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pollution
. The average temperature of the
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world
is increasing day by day. After that the North Pole glaciers are melting and raising the sea level and flooding lower places. Another major
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problem
such as air
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pollution
, water
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pollution
, sound
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pollution
etc. Air
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pollution
can cause respiratory disease and skin disease such as asthma.
For example
, WHO estimated in 2007 that air
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pollution
causes a half million
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people
deaths per year in India.
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So
, there are
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many
reasons for the
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environmental
problems.

To sum up, loses of certain
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plants
and
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animals
not
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only
major cause of
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environmental
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problems
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but
also
it includes more
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problems
. To
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prevent
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environmental
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problems
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people
all over the
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world
needs to work to save
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plants
and
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animals
along with preventing
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different
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pollutions
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our times is the loss of particular species plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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