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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.9

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 9
With increasing concerns about the environment, people want to know what is the key issue related to the environment. A part of people think that the disappearance of special kinds of trees and animals is the key trouble while other parts of them believe that some other serious phenomenon are existing. In my knowledge, I agree that losing plants and animals are extremely dangerous to the earth. However, we should solve other problems such as air pollution and climate change. Admittedly, more and more species are extinct from the world. For example, the recent forest fire in Australia has destroyed a huge area of the land where millions of animals and trees have been habituated there. Although their extinction won’t cause a direct influence on humanity’s survival, it actually leads to the change of the whole ecosystem. Such a change will contribute to more serious problems of earth like global warming. In addition, the decreasing number of species means the survival risk is increasing because biological diversity is a key complex system. However, climate change and air pollution are more serious in human’s life. For instance, the population of climate refugees is a big problem for many countries whilst a vast majority of diseases have been proved to have a relationship with air pollution. Obviously, climate change and air pollution are threatening us so that we have to solve them first. Base on the discussion, plants and animals should be environment questions because it shows that threaten is closed to us. But climate change and air pollution are becoming the most serious issue for our survival. Thus, I think that other problems are more important than losing some special species.
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people
want to know what is the key issue related to the environment. A part of
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people
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think
that the disappearance of special kinds of trees and
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animals
is the key trouble while
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other
parts of them believe that
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some
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other
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serious
phenomenon are existing. In my knowledge, I
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agree
that losing plants and
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animals
are
extremely
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dangerous
to the earth.
However
, we should solve
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other
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problems
such as
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air
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pollution
and
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climate
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change
.

Admittedly
, more and more species are extinct from the world.
For example
, the recent forest fire in Australia has
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destroyed
a huge area of the land where millions of
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animals
and trees have
been habituated
there. Although their extinction won’t cause a direct influence on humanity’s survival, it actually leads to the
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change
of the whole ecosystem. Such a
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change
will contribute to more
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serious
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problems
of earth like global warming.
In addition
, the decreasing number of species means the survival
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risk
is increasing
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because
biological diversity is a key complex system.

However
,
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climate
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change
and
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air
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pollution
are more
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serious
in human’s life.
For instance
, the population of
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climate
refugees is a
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big
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problem
for
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many
countries whilst a vast majority of diseases have
been proved
to have a relationship with
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air
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pollution
.
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,
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climate
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change
and
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air
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pollution
are threatening us
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so
that we
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have to
solve them
first
.

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animals
should be environment questions
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because
it
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shows
that threaten
is closed
to us.
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But
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climate
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change
and
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air
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pollution
are becoming the most
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serious
issue for our survival.
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, I
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think
that
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other
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problems
are more
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important
than losing
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some
special species.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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