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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.52

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 52
One of the main problems faced by the world today is climate challenges. While some people believe that the major environmental challenge is the extinction of some particular types of animal and plants, some are of the opinion that we have more critical environmental situations. This essay is going to explain these two opinions and my belief will be added. On the one hand, environmental pollution result in the disappearance of some specific plants and animal in the ecosystems. This plant and animal go into extinction because the environmental ambiance has become unfavourable for them to thrive and live in, such environmental conditions include soil contamination, water pollution, global warming and air degradation to mention a few. For example, wildlife who live and dwells in the polar region are reducing day by day and will soon be totally absent due to global warming that is melting away the ice in this region. The loss of different living things can be prevented if we pay more attention to conserving our planet. On the other hand, there are more pressing issues that result from our habitat pollution. The life span of human beings is reducing rapidly and this is a major problem caused by environmental degradation. The same way plants and animal are affected by the poor condition of the environment, humans are equally affected too. For illustration, several diseases and sickness have been traced to the presence of greenhouse gases in the atmosphere, thereby reducing the number of years of humans. Health challenges resulting from environment deterioration should also be paid more attention. In conclusion, the world we live in, is important for plants, animals as well as human beings. Many plants and animal breeds are lost and this is a top environmental problem that some people recognise while others believe there are more important challenges. I believe every part of the ecosystem that is lost, including plants, animals and humans are all significant.
One of the main problems faced by the world
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today
is climate
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challenges
. While
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some
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people
believe that the major
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environmental
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challenge
is the extinction of
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some
particular types of
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animal
and
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plants
,
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some
are of the opinion that we have more critical
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environmental
situations. This essay is going to
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explain
these two opinions and my belief will be
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added
.

On the one hand,
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environmental
pollution result in the disappearance of
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some
specific
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plants
and
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animal
in the ecosystems. This
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plant
and
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animal
go into extinction
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because
the
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environmental
ambiance has become
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unfavourable
for them to thrive and
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live
in, such
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environmental
conditions include soil contamination, water pollution, global warming and air degradation to mention a few.
For example
, wildlife who
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live
and dwells in the polar region are reducing day by day and will
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soon
be
totally
absent due to global warming
that is
melting away the ice in this region. The loss of
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different
living things can be
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prevented
if we pay more attention to conserving our planet.

On the other hand
, there are more pressing issues that result from our habitat pollution. The life span of
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human
beings is reducing
rapidly
and this is a major problem caused by
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environmental
degradation. The same way
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plants
and
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animal
are
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affected
by the poor condition of the environment,
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humans
are
equally
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affected
too. For illustration, several diseases and sickness have
been traced
to the presence of greenhouse gases in the atmosphere, thereby reducing the number of years of
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humans
. Health
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challenges
resulting from environment deterioration should
also
be paid
more attention.

In conclusion
, the world we
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live
in, is
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important
for
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plants
,
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animals
as well
as
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human
beings.
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Many
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plants
and
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animal
breeds
are lost
and this is a top
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environmental
problem that
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some
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people
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recognise
while others believe there are more
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important
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challenges
. I believe every part of the ecosystem that
is lost
, including
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plants
,
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animals
and
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humans
are all significant.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 52

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Task Achievement: 8.5
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