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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.50

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 50
People are calling into question the most important environmental issue of these days. While some advocate the main environmental predicament is losing some kind of plants and animals, others assert there are more significant problems. Both sides of argument present rational reasons which will be elaborated. On the one hand, there are so many remarkable reasons of decreasing number of animals and plants. To begin with, due to the releasing carbon dioxide to the atmosphere, it is getting worse and as a result of this a huge number of living creatures either have drastically decreased or are listed as endangered species year by year. For instance, in every city there is enough gas factory which spoils the environment by releasing some kind of dangerous gases and put their lives in jeopardy. On the other hand, others put forward that much more important issues can be mentioned as compared to the loss of living creatures. They assert besides animals and plants, peoples population have a considerable decrease on a yearly basis Because of the polluted atmosphere. Simply put, humans are suffering from kind of diseases which related to the difficulty in breath as a result of the air pollution. For example, lung cancer, heart diseases, and other chronic illness. To conclude, according to the points discussed above, it could be seen there are some environmental predicaments which can lead to losing animals and plants. Nevertheless, a group of people believes other remarkable consequences can be considered. From my perspective, the idea of people who great care about eliminating living creatures will come true.
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People
are calling into question the most
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important
environmental issue of these days. While
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some
advocate the main environmental predicament is losing
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some
kind of
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plants
and
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animals
, others assert there are more significant problems. Both sides of argument present rational reasons which will
be elaborated
.

On the one hand, there are
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so
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many
remarkable reasons of decreasing number of
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animals
and
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plants
. To
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begin
with, due to the releasing carbon dioxide to the atmosphere, it is getting worse and
as a result
of this a huge number of living creatures either have
drastically
decreased or
are listed
as endangered species year by year.
For instance
, in every city there is
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enough
gas factory which spoils the environment by releasing
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some
kind of
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dangerous
gases and put their
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lives
in jeopardy. On the
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other
hand, others put forward that much more
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important
issues can
be mentioned
as compared to the loss of living creatures. They assert
besides
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animals
and
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plants
,
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peoples
population have a considerable decrease on a yearly basis
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Because
of the polluted atmosphere.

Simply
put, humans are suffering from kind of diseases which related to the difficulty in breath
as a result
of the air pollution.
For example
, lung cancer, heart diseases, and
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other
chronic illness.

To conclude
, according to the points discussed above, it could be
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seen
there are
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some
environmental predicaments which can lead to losing
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animals
and
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plants
.
Nevertheless
, a group of
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people
believes
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other
remarkable consequences can
be considered
. From my perspective, the
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idea
of
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people
who great care about eliminating living creatures will
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come
true.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 50

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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