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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.47

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 47
Some people realize that the main environmental problem of our era is the loss of some species of plants and animals, whereas, others say that there might be more important environmental losses. Over time, the nature has experienced several environmental crises and the losses are counting on. If it goes like that, the human earth will no longer be able to sustain. It is true that losses of specific plants and animals are one of the most important losses of recent days, but, there certainly are other environmental losses. Losses of several plants and animals has become a burning question now-a-days. For example, the death of last white elephant in Bangladesh has witnessed the last of its species. 'Mews' (A tree which gives fruit after every eight years) has been already extinct from the earth. There is some result of negative environmental changes. Plants like 'Mewa' is no more to be planted. The legacy of Dinosaur and Dragon has ended long before. The reason behind these losses are remarkable. The climate of the civilization is changing drastically and thus these kind of plants and animals are extinct. Furthermore, there are so many other climate crisis, for which, the existing rare types of birds are fading away. Change of Climate not only witnessed the losses of plants and animals, it causes other environmental imbalances such as Draughts, Floods, Greenhouse effect etc. Every year the Ice world is melting, which results in the rise of sea level. Millions of people are loosing their home and cattle due to natural calamities. For instance, 'Aila' has occurred last year, 25th of June 2018, and cause a serious damage to human civilization. Along with plants and animals, there are more important topics to focus for making and keeping this universe a good liveable place. To narrate it all in a nutshell, due to natural calamities, which are created mostly by the humans, is responsible for losses of lives and as well as the unsuitable living place. I strongly argue that the climate and the animals should be focused to be protected in no time. Otherwise, the world will no longer sustain.
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realize that the main
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environmental
problem of our era is the
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loss
of
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some
species of
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plants
and
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animals
, whereas, others say that there might be more
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important
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environmental
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losses
. Over time, the nature has experienced several
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environmental
crises and the
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losses
are counting on. If it goes like that, the human earth will no longer be able to sustain. It is true that
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losses
of specific
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plants
and
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animals
are one of the most
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important
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losses
of recent days,
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but
, there
certainly
are
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other
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environmental
losses.

Losses of several
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plants
and
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animals
has become a burning question
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now
-a-days.
For example
, the death of last white elephant in Bangladesh has witnessed the last of its species. 'Mews' (A tree which gives fruit after every eight years) has been already extinct from the earth. There is
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some
result of
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negative
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environmental
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changes
.
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Plants
like '
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Mewa
' is no more to
be planted
. The legacy of Dinosaur and Dragon has ended long
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before
. The reason behind these
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losses
are remarkable.
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The
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climate
of the civilization is changing
drastically
and
thus
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these kind
of
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plants
and
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animals
are extinct.
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, there are
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crisis, for which, the existing rare types of birds are fading away.

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Change
of
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not
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only
witnessed the
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losses
of
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plants
and
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animals
, it causes
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other
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environmental
imbalances such as
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Draughts
, Floods, Greenhouse effect etc. Every year the Ice world is melting, which results in the rise of sea level. Millions of
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people
are loosing their home and cattle due to natural calamities.
For instance
, '
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Aila
' has occurred last year, 25th of June 2018, and cause
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a serious damage
to human civilization. Along with
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plants
and
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animals
, there are more
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important
topics to focus for making and keeping this universe a
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good
liveable place.

To narrate it all in a nutshell, due to natural calamities, which
are created
mostly
by the humans, is responsible for
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losses
of
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lives
and
as well
as the unsuitable living place. I
strongly
argue that the
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climate
and the
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animals
should
be focused
to
be protected
in no time.
Otherwise
, the world will no longer sustain.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 47

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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