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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.46

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 46
Many people believe that a significant environmental problem at the present time is the decreased population of some species and plants on our planet. However, are those who suppose that is environmental problems. Firstly, this essay will discuss serious problems as endangered plants and animals in reason human influence on it, and secondly, it will analyse that pollution from vehicles and industrial area are causing a severe problem to the environment. On the one hand, some people think that the effect of animals’ life can be severe, especially for animals and plants that are endangered today. It could lead to a number of problems such as poaching, habitat loss, and food chain disruption in the long run. These effects tend to have an especially on the very poorest in society due to the least resources for counting environmental effects. Rarely do people realize the consequences of human impact on the surroundings in particular species plants and animals. For example, the Asia tiger population decrease due to poaching by a human to receive financial gains. On the other hand, those who assume that the essential environmental problem and could lead to many factors, such as emissions from cars, factories, or other human activities. Moreover, many developing countries are becoming industrialized, and the number of factories is growing worldwide. As a result, both vehicles and industrial complexes produce emissions, and exhaust fumes on the surroundings are intensive. If society were not to control the emissions of the factories, we would obtain ecological catastrophe on our planet soon in the future. For instance, in Europe, some factures established filtration and processing in the industrial complexes to decline pollutions that are viable options in a safe environment in that area. In conclusion, I am firmly convinced that people should introduce their initiative to support for solving issues related to the environment of our planet and endanger some spaces and plants.
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people
believe that a significant
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environmental
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problem
at the present time is the decreased population of
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some
species and
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plants
on our planet.
However
, are those who suppose
that is
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environmental
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problems
.
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, this essay will discuss serious
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problems
as endangered
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plants
and
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animals
in reason
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human
influence on it, and
secondly
, it will
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that pollution from vehicles and industrial area are causing a severe
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problem
to the environment.

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people
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think
that the effect of
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animals’
life can be severe,
especially
for
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animals
and
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plants
that
are endangered
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today
. It could lead to a number of
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problems
such as poaching, habitat loss, and food chain disruption in the long run. These effects tend to have an
especially
on the
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very
poorest in society due to the least resources for counting
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environmental
effects. Rarely do
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people
realize the consequences of
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human
impact on the surroundings
in particular
species
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plants
and
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animals
.
For example
, the Asia tiger population decrease due to poaching by a
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human
to receive financial gains.

On the other hand
, those who assume that the essential
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environmental
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problem
and could lead to
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many
factors, such as emissions from cars, factories, or other
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human
activities.
Moreover
,
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many
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developing countries
are becoming industrialized, and the number of factories is growing worldwide.
As a result
, both vehicles and industrial complexes produce emissions, and exhaust fumes on the surroundings are intensive. If society were not to control the emissions of the factories, we would obtain ecological catastrophe on our planet
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soon
in the future.
For instance
, in Europe,
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some
factures established filtration and processing in the industrial complexes to decline pollutions that are viable options in a safe environment in that area.

In conclusion
, I am
firmly
convinced that
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people
should introduce their initiative to support for solving issues related to the environment of our planet and endanger
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some
spaces and
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plants
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 46

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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