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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.43

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 43
Some people argue that the major environmental issue of our generation is the disappearance of specific types of flora and fauna, while others mention that there are more significant environmental issues. This essay will discuss both views and explain why I think the loss of specific plants and animals is more important issue than others. There are two main reasons why the problem of endangered species should be focused. First of all, wildlife has the same rights as humankind; therefore, their precious lives should be protected. It is ethically and morally wrong that many lives of wild plants and animals are taken away due to human activities like hunting and farming. Furthermore, the loss of particular species is significant because once certain species go extinct, it is irreversible. This negatively affects the delicate balance of the natural world. Thus, the protection of endangered species is imperative for maintaining the healthy environment. On the other hand, there are other issues with the environment which need some attention, such as global warming and disposal of waste. The main cause of global warming is the increased amount of carbon dioxide emissions. As the temperature of the earth increases, the sea level also rises, which is a critical issue because it contributes to the reduction in the size of habitat. Another issue is an increasing amount of rubbish around the world. A good illustration of this is the accumulation of undegraded plastic products found in the ground and the sea. These plastics remained in the soils and water release toxic chemicals over the years, and contaminate the environment. In conclusion, we face a variety of issues with the environment in recent years; however, I believe that the issue of the loss of specific species of plants and animals requires more attention that other issues since the lives of wild animals are as important as ours, and the loss of species adversely affect to ecosystem, which is critical to our lives.
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argue that the major environmental
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issue
of our generation is the disappearance of specific types of flora and fauna, while others mention that there are more significant environmental
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issues
. This essay will discuss both views and
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explain
why I
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think
the
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loss
of specific plants and
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animals
is more
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important
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issue
than others.

There are two main reasons why the problem of endangered species should
be focused
.
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First of all
, wildlife has the same rights as humankind;
therefore
, their precious
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lives
should
be protected
. It is
ethically
and
morally
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wrong
that
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many
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lives
of wild plants and
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animals
are taken
away due to human activities like hunting and farming.
Furthermore
, the
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loss
of particular species is significant
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because
once certain species go extinct, it is irreversible. This
negatively
affects the delicate balance of the natural world.
Thus
, the protection of endangered species is imperative for maintaining the healthy environment.

On the
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other
hand, there are
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other
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issues
with the environment which need
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some
attention, such as global warming and disposal of waste. The main cause of global warming is the increased amount of carbon dioxide emissions. As the temperature of the earth increases, the sea level
also
rises, which is a critical
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issue
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because
it contributes to the reduction in the size of habitat. Another
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issue
is an increasing amount of rubbish around the world. A
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good
illustration of this is the accumulation of
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undegraded
plastic products found in the ground and the sea. These plastics remained in the soils and water release toxic chemicals over the years, and contaminate the environment.

In conclusion
, we face a variety of
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issues
with the environment in recent years;
however
, I believe that the
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issue
of the
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loss
of specific species of plants and
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animals
requires more attention that
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other
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issues
since the
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lives
of wild
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animals
are as
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important
as ours, and the
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loss
of species
adversely
affect to ecosystem, which is critical to our
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lives
.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 43

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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