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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.37

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 37
People around the world are becoming increasingly concerned about the degradation of the environment these days. Some individuals believe that the biggest environment issue facing the world nowadays is the extinction of various plant and animal species; however, others opine that there are problems far bigger than this. In my view, other environmental hazards, such as the overuse of plastic by the consumers, are the most concerning. On the one hand, some people say that the most prominent environmental problem in the current era is that we are losing different types of plants and animals. The reason for this is the imbalance in the food chain, which is produced by the disappearance of plants and causes animals to become extinct due to lack of food. For example, recent research suggests that white elephants have disappeared because they were not getting sufficient quantity of herbs in their habitat to survive. Therefore, this disturbance in the wild flora and fauna ultimately impacts the dietary patterns of all the other life forms on the Earth. On the other hand, another group of individuals has the opinion that there are far more damaging environmental hazards. This is because some pollutants, such as plastic, deteriorate not only the air quality in cities but also the water quality in the rivers and oceans, which makes numerous planktons, plants, and sea animals to disappear. A whale, for instance, was found last month with forty kilograms of plastic in its stomach; it ate plastic bottles because there was no phytoplankton to eat and the water was polluted with these bottles. Thus, there are more hazardous elements that cause far more damage to the environment. In conclusion, while some people believe that the extinction of several plant and animal species is the major environmental problem of these times, there are others who are concerned more by other issues. In my opinion, the rise in the levels of plastic in the seawater is more dangerous than anything else for the environment.
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around the world are becoming
increasingly
concerned about the degradation of the environment these days.
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Some
individuals believe that the biggest environment issue facing the world nowadays is the extinction of various
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plant
and
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animal
species;
however
, others opine that there are problems far bigger than this. In my view,
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other
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environmental
hazards, such as the overuse of
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plastic
by the consumers, are the most concerning.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
say that the most prominent
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environmental
problem in the
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current
era is that we are losing
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different
types of
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plants
and
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animals
.
The reason for this is
the imbalance in the food chain, which
is produced
by the disappearance of
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plants
and causes
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animals
to become extinct due to lack of food.
For example
, recent research suggests that white elephants have disappeared
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because
they were not getting sufficient quantity of herbs in their habitat to survive.
Therefore
, this disturbance in the wild flora and fauna
ultimately
impacts the dietary patterns of all the
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other
life forms on the Earth.

On the
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other
hand, another group of individuals has the opinion that there are far more damaging
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environmental
hazards. This is
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because
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some
pollutants, such as
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plastic
, deteriorate not
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only
the air quality in cities
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but
also
the water quality in the rivers and oceans, which
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makes
numerous
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planktons
,
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plants
, and sea
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animals
to disappear. A whale,
for instance
,
was found
last month with forty kilograms of
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plastic
in its stomach; it ate
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plastic
bottles
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because
there was no phytoplankton to eat and the water
was polluted
with these bottles.
Thus
, there are more hazardous elements that cause far more damage to the environment.

In conclusion
, while
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some
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people
believe that the extinction of several
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plant
and
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animal
species is the major
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environmental
problem of these times, there are others who
are concerned
more by
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other
issues. In my opinion, the rise in the levels of
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plastic
in the seawater is more
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dangerous
than anything else for the environment.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 37

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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