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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.36

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 36
These days, the environmental issue represents a huge problem, since in the last decade the human activities have deeply impaired it. To this extent, some people deem the loss of some animals and vegetable species as the most tragic event, while others highlight that more relevant problems are hidden behind this dramatic situation. I totally agree with this second point of view and in this essay I will offer some food for thoughts. Firstly, the species impairment is actually a consequence of more important harms. In details, the human activities have taken too much advantage of the environment and the technological development has been one of the most important causes of its alteration. What I mean is that pollution due to the intensive use of various means of transports such as to industries and so on, together with other practises as deforestation has, of course, contribute to this phenomenon and interest a wider distribution. Another reason for this, is probably the major cause of everything, or rather the global warming. For instance, this problem affects areas all over the world. Particularly, the comprehensive increase of temperatures has surely impaired animals and plants, but also has affected seas, lakes, glacial areas with the augment of sea levels. As a result, this would cause more dangerous problems that would also interest the human being. Having said that, also the loss of various species is a main concern, since it is a real consequence of what has been said before. The existence of all species, in fact, guarantees a good balance in the world, with a complex mechanism prey-predator and its impairment is itself prompter of others main environmental issues. To sum up, many problems have been nowadays recognised to be pivotal for the environmental problem and into this view we can both consider the loss of species and the global warming. I believe that there's no a ranking to be filled, but all should be considered as major problems since are deeply interconnected by a cause-consequence logic. Personally, I think we all should start correcting our behaviours to take care of the environment.
These days, the environmental issue represents a huge
problem
, since in the last decade the human activities have
deeply
impaired it. To this extent,
some
people
deem the loss of
some
animals and vegetable species as the most tragic
event
, while others highlight that more relevant
problems
are hidden
behind this dramatic situation. I
totally
agree
with this second point of view and in this essay I will offer
some
food for thoughts.

Firstly
, the species impairment is actually a consequence of more
important
harms. In
details
, the human activities have taken too much advantage of the environment and the technological development has been one of the most
important
causes of its alteration. What I mean is that pollution due to the intensive
use
of various means of transports such as to industries and
so
on, together with other
practises
as deforestation has,
of course
, contribute to this phenomenon and interest a wider distribution.

Another reason for this, is
probably
the major cause of everything, or
rather
the global warming.
For instance
, this
problem
affects areas all over the world.
Particularly
, the comprehensive increase of temperatures has
surely
impaired animals and plants,
but
also
has
affected
seas, lakes, glacial areas with
the augment
of sea levels.
As a result
, this would cause more
dangerous
problems
that would
also
interest the human being.

Having said that,
also
the loss of various species is a main concern, since it is a real consequence of what has
been said
before
. The existence of all species, in fact, guarantees a
good
balance in the world, with a complex mechanism prey-predator and its impairment is itself prompter of others main environmental issues.

To sum up,
many
problems
have been nowadays
recognised
to be pivotal for the environmental
problem
and into this view we can both consider the loss of species and the global warming. I believe that there's
no
a ranking to
be filled
,
but
all should
be considered
as major
problems
since are
deeply
interconnected by a cause-consequence logic.
Personally
, I
think
we all should
start
correcting our
behaviours
to take care of the environment.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 36

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  American English
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351 words
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