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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion v.3

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. 3
While many believe that the extinction of certain species is the greatest threat to our environment, others feel that there are more pressing environmental issues. This essay discusses both perspectives and why I believe that there are more critical issues than the loss of species. There are two main reasons why people might believe that the extinction of certain plants and animals is the most serious issue. The first of these concerns the way that plants and species are interrelated and how the loss of one species can lead to the loss of other species. For instance, if coral dies many of the fish and marine life that feed off it also die. Moreover, many people note the importance of the biodiversity of the planet and point out that when a species dies this is reduced. This biodiversity is important because we are constantly finding that certain species have important applications such as in the field of medicine. However, others consider that there are more serious environmental issues. One of the reasons is that the extinction of a species can be considered a part of nature. For instance, we know that the dinosaurs died out due to naturally changing weather patterns, and life of our planet still continues. In addition, man-made problems are emerging such as Global warming that are so serious they have potential to wipe out all life on our planet. If the earth continues to experience rising temperatures it will start to become uninhabitable even for humans. In conclusion, in my opinion both sides of this argument have their merits. However, it seems that man-made global warming is the most serious problem because it ultimately threatens to not only destroy certain species but also destroy all life on our planet including humans. Moreover, it seems that we are not taking enough steps to mitigate this catastrophic problem.
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many
believe that the extinction of
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certain
species is the greatest threat to our environment, others feel that there are more pressing environmental
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issues
. This essay discusses both perspectives and why I believe that there are more critical
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issues
than the loss of species.

There are two main reasons why
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people
might believe that the extinction of
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certain
plants and animals is the most
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serious
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issue
. The
first
of these concerns the way that plants and species
are interrelated
and how the loss of one species can lead to the loss of other species.
For instance
, if coral
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dies
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many
of the fish and marine
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life
that feed off it
also
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die
.
Moreover
,
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many
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people
note the importance of the biodiversity of the
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planet
and point out that when a species
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dies
this is
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reduced
. This biodiversity is
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important
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because
we are
constantly
finding that
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certain
species have
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important
applications such as in the field of medicine.

However
, others consider that there are more
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serious
environmental
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issues
. One of the reasons is that the extinction of a species can
be considered
a part of nature.
For instance
, we know that the dinosaurs
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died
out due to
naturally
changing weather patterns, and
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life
of our
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planet
still
continues.
In addition
,
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man
-made problems are emerging such as Global warming that are
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so
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serious
they have potential to wipe out all
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life
on our
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planet
. If the earth continues to experience rising temperatures it will
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start
to become uninhabitable even for humans.

In conclusion
, in my opinion both sides of this argument have their merits.
However
, it seems that
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man
-made global warming is the most
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serious
problem
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because
it
ultimately
threatens to not
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only
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destroy
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certain
species
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but
also
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destroy
all
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life
on our
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planet
including humans.
Moreover
, it seems that we are not taking
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enough
steps to mitigate this catastrophic problem.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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