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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problem. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.26

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problem. v. 26
Environmental problems creates serious detriments to the world as a whole. While some individuals opine that the major menace affecting the ecology is the extinction of plants and animals, other people believe that there is a highly important environmental problem such as the pollution of the ecosystem. In my opinion, I strongly support the latter notion which states that there is a more imperative environmental menace that needs to be curbed with immediate effect. Several people opine that the loss of specific types or species of plants and animals is the main issue facing the environment because life itself is based mainly on plants and animals. Unarguably, without plants, there would be no life on earth no matter the circumstance. Plants play a very crucial role in the ecosystem due to the fact that they absorb carbon dioxide that animals release into the air and give out oxygen to be reused by animals. Also, an extremely interesting fact is that various plants have the strong possibility to absorb toxicants from the environment, and as a result, protecting the ecosystem. In addition, both plants and animals help stabilize the food chain in other to attain optimum environmental development. Therefore, without these highly essential plants and animals, there is an environmental challenge such as death, drought, and starvation. On the other hand, I, among other people is of the opinion that there is a more cogent serious menace affecting the world which is pollution. Pollution is mainly divided into three namely air, water and land pollution. Air pollution is caused mainly by deadly gases such as carbon monoxide, hydrogen sulphide, and hydro fluorocarbons being released into the atmosphere by vehicles, production companies and refineries. Land pollution is caused by deforestation, testing of nuclear weapons, and over grazing to mention a few. Lastly, water pollution can be caused by dumping of refuse into water bodies and oil exploration. All three forms of pollution lead to depletion of the ozone layer, respiration diseases in humans, global warming, radiation, earthquakes, landslides, erosion, drought, famine, health related conditions, and also the extinction of both plants and animals. Currently, global warming and the depletion of the ozone layer which further leads to radiation is an impending issue in the world causing several other problems. As such, pollution is the most imperative menace affecting the entire ecosystem. To sum up, in this twenty-first century, extinction of plants and animals should be put into prompt consideration, but there is a more grievous issue affecting g the environment in all countries of the world. This menace tends to be pollution and keen interest must be placed upon this problem before it leads to extinction of all forms of life on earth.
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Environmental
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problems
creates serious detriments to the
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world
as a whole. While
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some
individuals opine that the major
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menace
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affecting
the ecology is the
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extinction
of
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plants
and
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animals
,
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other
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people
believe that there is a
highly
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important
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environmental
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problem
such as the
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pollution
of the ecosystem. In my opinion, I
strongly
support the latter notion which states that there is a more imperative
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environmental
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menace
that needs to
be curbed
with immediate effect.

Several
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people
opine that the loss of specific types or species of
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plants
and
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animals
is the main issue facing the environment
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because
life itself
is based
mainly
on
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plants
and
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animals
.
Unarguably
, without
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plants
, there would be no life on earth no matter the circumstance.
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Plants
play a
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very
crucial role in the ecosystem due to the fact that they absorb carbon dioxide that
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animals
release into the air and give out oxygen to
be reused
by
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animals
.
Also
, an
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extremely interesting
fact is that various
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plants
have the strong possibility to absorb
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toxicants
from the environment, and
as a result
, protecting the ecosystem.
In addition
, both
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plants
and
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animals
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help
stabilize the food chain in
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other
to attain optimum
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environmental
development.
Therefore
, without these
highly
essential
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plants
and
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animals
, there is an
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environmental
challenge such as death, drought, and starvation.

On the
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other
hand, I, among
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other
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people
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is
of the opinion that there is a more cogent serious
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menace
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affecting
the
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world
which is
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pollution
.
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Pollution
is
mainly
divided into three
namely
air, water and land
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pollution
. Air
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pollution
is caused
mainly
by deadly gases such as carbon monoxide, hydrogen
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sulphide
, and hydro fluorocarbons
being released
into the atmosphere by vehicles, production
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companies
and refineries. Land
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pollution
is caused
by deforestation, testing of nuclear weapons, and over grazing to mention a few.
Lastly
, water
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pollution
can
be caused
by dumping of refuse into water bodies and oil exploration. All three forms of
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pollution
lead to depletion of the ozone layer, respiration diseases in humans, global warming, radiation, earthquakes, landslides, erosion, drought, famine, health related conditions, and
also
the
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extinction
of both
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plants
and
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animals
.
Currently
, global warming and the depletion of the ozone layer which
further
leads to radiation is an impending issue in the
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world
causing several
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other
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problems
. As such,
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pollution
is the most imperative
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menace
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affecting
the entire ecosystem.

To sum up, in this twenty-
first
century,
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extinction
of
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plants
and
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animals
should
be put
into prompt consideration,
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but
there is a more grievous issue
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affecting
g the environment in all countries of the
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world
. This
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menace
tends to be
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pollution
and keen interest
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must
be placed
upon this
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problem
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before
it leads to
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extinction
of all forms of life on earth.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
60Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problem. v. 26

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
451 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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