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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.24

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 24
Some people consider that the loss of individual species of plants and animals is the main environmental problem of our time. Attempts to preserve rare or dying species are carried out in zoos or other specialist plant and animal facilities, through breeding programmes, preservation orders and other forms of protection and there was genuine sadness among many when the last surviving white rhino has died earlier this year. Survival of the fittest is nature's way of ruthlessly allowing weaker specimens to die out, although mankind has also contributed to falling animal numbers through hunting and poaching. However, whether saving individual species should be the main focus of environmental protection is debatable. Climate change and excessive use of plastic are just two other major problems that deserve our attention. The evidence of climate change is there for us all to see: rising sea levels and associated flooding with the loss of homes at low land levels are becoming more frequent. Many countries and island communities are now calling for urgent action to delay, halt or even reverse the process, although if we believe the experts, reversal is impossible. Habitable areas are gradually shrinking, often for some of the poorest groups of people, but there seems to be little obvious action taking place. If the major contributors to climate change will not support the reduction of greenhouse gases, there is little hope for the future. Naturalists have also begun to expose the serious problems arising from discarded plastic waste. Birds and animals can die gruesome deaths through being trapped or caught up in plastic bags or ropes, while the long process required for these plastics to decay means that they remain a threat for many years to come. Worse, there is now beginning to be evidence of sea creatures ingesting smaller globules of disintegrating plastic, which harms them and all the other creatures in their particular food chain. The loss of particular species, both flora and fauna, is cause for regret, but I do not agree that they are the most important environmental problems these days. If climate change and damage from plastic containers, there will be less land and less food for everyone, including plants and animals.
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Some
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people
consider that the loss of individual species of plants and
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animals
is the main environmental
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problem
of our time. Attempts to preserve rare or dying species
are carried
out in zoos or
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other
specialist plant and
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animal
facilities, through breeding
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programmes
, preservation orders and
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other
forms of protection and there was genuine sadness among
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many
when the last surviving white rhino has
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died
earlier this year. Survival of the fittest is nature's way of
ruthlessly
allowing weaker specimens to
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die
out, although mankind has
also
contributed to falling
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animal
numbers through hunting and poaching.
However
, whether saving individual species should be the main focus of environmental protection is debatable.
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Climate
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change
and excessive
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use
of
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plastic
are
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just
two
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other
major
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problems
that deserve our attention.

The evidence of
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climate
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change
is there for us all to
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see
: rising sea levels and associated flooding with the loss of homes at low land levels are becoming more frequent.
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Many
countries and island communities are
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now
calling for urgent action to delay, halt or even reverse the process, although if we believe the experts, reversal is impossible. Habitable areas are
gradually
shrinking,
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often
for
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some
of the poorest groups of
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people
,
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but
there seems to be
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little
obvious action taking place. If the major contributors to
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climate
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change
will not support the reduction of greenhouse gases, there is
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little
hope for the future. Naturalists have
also
begun to expose the serious
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problems
arising from discarded
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plastic
waste. Birds and
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animals
can
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die
gruesome deaths through
being trapped
or caught up in
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plastic
bags or ropes, while the long process required for these
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plastics
to decay means that they remain a threat for
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many
years to
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come
. Worse, there is
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now
beginning to be evidence of sea creatures ingesting smaller globules of disintegrating
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plastic
, which harms them and all the
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other
creatures in their particular food chain. The loss of particular species, both flora and fauna, is cause for regret,
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but
I do not
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agree
that they are the most
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important
environmental
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problems
these days. If
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climate
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change
and damage from
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plastic
containers, there will be less land and less food for everyone, including plants and
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animals
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 24

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
366 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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