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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important Environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.21

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important Environmental problems. v. 21
It is obvious that the planet is in great danger, but people disagree over whether the main problem is the loss of certain species or other issues such as climate change. This essay will discuss both views and conclude that they are both interrelated, and that there is no one problem that is the worst. Around the world, species of animals and plants are dying at a shocking rate. Forests are being cut down to make way for giant cattle farms, while endangered animals are being poached so that their body parts can be sent to China to make fake medicines. This is a devastating trend not just because these animals don’t deserve to die, but because biodiversity is tremendously important to the planet. When sharks are killed, for example, it is not just the sharks that die. The whole underwater ecosystem faces collapse, which can be catastrophic for the world. Other problems exist aside from just the loss of species. Major environmental issues today include climate change. This is caused by many factors such as air pollution and the loss of forests and coral reefs, and it has massive potential ramifications, such as sea level rises and desertification. Ultimately, this could lead to the extinction of humanity and the destruction of our world. However, to say that it is worse than the extinction of certain species overlooks the fact that they are related. When we kill certain plants and animals, we are contributing to climate change indirectly, and all of these environmental tragedies bring the world closer to complete destruction. In conclusion, there are many ways in which humans are wreaking havoc on the planet, but it is hard to say that one is worse than another because they all add up to the same result.
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danger
,
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but
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people
disagree over whether the main problem is the loss of certain species or other issues such as climate
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change
. This essay will discuss both views and conclude that they are both interrelated, and that there is no one problem
that is
the worst.

Around the world, species of
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animals
and plants are dying at a shocking rate. Forests are being
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cut
down to
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make
way for giant cattle farms, while endangered
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animals
are
being poached
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so
that their body parts can be
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sent
to China to
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make
fake medicines. This is a devastating trend not
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just
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because
these
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animals
don’t deserve to
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die
,
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but
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because
biodiversity is
tremendously
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important
to the planet. When sharks
are killed
,
for example
, it is not
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just
the sharks that
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die
. The whole underwater ecosystem faces collapse, which can be catastrophic for the world.

Other problems exist aside from
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just
the loss of species. Major environmental issues
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today
include climate
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change
. This
is caused
by
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many
factors such as air pollution and the loss of forests and coral reefs, and it has massive potential ramifications, such as sea level rises and desertification.
Ultimately
, this could lead to the extinction of humanity and the destruction of our world.
However
, to say that it is worse than the extinction of certain species overlooks the fact that they
are related
. When we kill certain plants and
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animals
, we are contributing to climate
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change
indirectly
, and all of these environmental tragedies bring the world closer to complete destruction.

In conclusion
, there are
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many
ways in which humans are wreaking havoc on the planet,
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but
it is
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hard
to say that one is worse than another
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because
they all
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add
up to the same result.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important Environmental problems. v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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