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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.11

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 11
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is an environmental problem. It is undeniable that losing particular species of plants and animals has become an essential problem of our planet. However, there is no absolute agreement on others, whose say that we have issues that are more significant in atmosphere. In this essay, I will examine both views and explain why I agree that humans have problems that are more current in nature than the loss particular species of flora and fauna. A commonly held belief is that the most valuable question is extinction some kind of animals and plants. As evidence of this they point to that, nature and our entire planet Earth compose from humanity, flora and fauna. Plants make our air fresh and clean. Some kind of herbs help us to be healthy. Moreover, without animal’s kingdom our planet will be empty, due to the fact that animals are a living organism like humans. Furthermore, they help, support and protect us. To be more precise, according many researching and practical experiments, animals are helping blind people, elder persons, and in particular educate children to be more kind and humanity. Others, however, myself included, have opinion that there are more essential environmental tasks. The most important consideration is air, water and land pollution. In most cases, it is result from unlimited using of natural resources. Secondly, cutting-edge people are using many things and consequently our planet is full with garbage, which harmed and lead to dying animals, fish and birds. The third important problem is global warming. Humans put to account from nature many benefits, but they do not pay attention about aftermath. For the reason that it can cost an arm and a leg for next generation. People use every day techniques, waste nature energy without to overthinking how it is harmful for surrounding. Admittedly, in contemporary it is often to happen environmental disaster like fires, floods, earthquake, and hurricanes. A clear example of this is fire in Australia in previous year in December, which lead to losing about 500 000 animals, burnout the woods and plants, pollution the air and water. In conclusion, I guess that humanity’s first vital problem should be all nature, entire our planet. If we will take care and safe our environment than air, water, people will safe and we would not loss of particular species of plants and animals.
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widely
discussed issues nowadays is an environmental
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problem
. It is undeniable that losing
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particular
species of
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plants
and
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animals
has become an essential
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problem
of our
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planet
.
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explain
why I
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agree
that humans have
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problems
that are more
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current
in
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nature
than the loss
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particular
species of flora and fauna.

A
commonly
held belief is that the most valuable question is extinction
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some
kind of
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animals
and
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plants
. As evidence of this they point to that,
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nature
and our entire
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planet
Earth
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compose from
humanity, flora and fauna.
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Plants
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make
our
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air
fresh and clean.
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Some
kind of herbs
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help
us to be healthy.
Moreover
, without
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animal’s
kingdom our
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planet
will be empty, due to the fact that
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animals
are a living organism like humans.
Furthermore
, they
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help
, support and protect us. To be more precise, according
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many
researching and practical experiments,
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animals
are helping blind
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people
, elder persons, and in
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particular
educate children to be more kind and humanity.

Others,
however
, myself included, have opinion that there are more essential environmental tasks. The most
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important
consideration is
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air
, water and land pollution.
In most cases
, it is result from unlimited using of natural resources.
Secondly
, cutting-edge
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people
are using
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many
things and
consequently
our
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planet
is
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full with
garbage, which harmed and lead to dying
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animals
, fish and birds. The third
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important
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problem
is global warming. Humans put to account from
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nature
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many
benefits,
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but
they do not pay attention about aftermath. For the reason that it can cost an arm and a leg for
next
generation.
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People
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use
every day techniques, waste
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nature
energy without to overthinking how it is harmful for surrounding.
Admittedly
, in contemporary it is
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often
to happen environmental disaster like fires, floods, earthquake, and hurricanes. A
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clear
example of this is fire in Australia in previous year in December, which lead to losing about 500 000
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animals
, burnout the woods and
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plants
, pollution the
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air
and water.

In conclusion
, I guess that humanity’s
first
vital
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problem
should be all
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nature
, entire our
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planet
. If we
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will take
care and safe our environment than
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air
, water,
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people
will
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safe and
we would not
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loss
of
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particular
species of
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plants
and
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animals
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
398 words
6
Overall Band Score
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