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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others says that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others says that there are more important environmental problems. v. 1
Our world is changing faster than anyone predicted. We live in a time of fast development, economic growth and globalization. However, it is also the time of uncontrolled environmental problems that are rising year by year. Shrinking drinkable water supplies, burning forests, melting ice caps - these are only a few of them. Some people say that the most serious and urgent environmental problem nowadays are endangered species of plants and animals, while others emphasise that some issues are demanding more attention. This essay discusses both perspectives and proves that an ecological crisis is a complex issue. There is no doubt, that shrinking habitats are a threat to biodiversity, in terms of both plants and animals. Many species such as blue whales, orangutan or gorillas are on the verge of extinction, also a tremendous number of plants are endangered and need protection if they are to survive. Ecologists and organizations are taking the lead to rescue fauna and flora of our planet, together with people who help them by making donations. As scientists say, climate changes are at the forefront of factors that have a significant impact on wildlife. The Earth's temperature is rising, causing huge damage to people, species and ecosystem. Global warming causes theming of ice caps, droughts in many regions and intensive weather anomalies. Unless it stops, future changes can be irreversible. Some of them are seen right now. Bushfires in Australia are destroying properties, forests and are killing people and millions of animals. Rising temperatures are the reason, why these fires are more frequent and harder to stop. Another environmental issue is overpopulation that may lead to a lack of drinkable water supplies. The bigger world population is, the more pressure is putting on depleting resources. In the future, safe water may become an increasingly precious commodity, leading to issues of water security. Also, global warming is a factor causing that we are running out of its drinkable supplies. Doubtless, our environment is in real danger and we have to take the lead for climate action to build a more resilient future for people and nature. To my mind, problems such as global warming and overpopulation resulting in shrinking drinkable water supplies are most alerting issues. The loss of many species of plants and animals is also an important one, but I cannot agree that this is the main environmental problem these days.
Our world is changing faster than anyone predicted. We
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live
in a time of
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fast
development, economic growth and globalization.
However
, it is
also
the time of uncontrolled
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environmental
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problems
that are rising year by year. Shrinking drinkable
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water
supplies, burning forests, melting ice caps
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-
these are
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only
a few of them.
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Some
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people
say that the most serious and urgent
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environmental
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problem
nowadays
are endangered
species of
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plants
and
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animals
, while others
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emphasise
that
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some
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issues
are demanding more attention. This essay discusses both perspectives and proves that an ecological crisis is a complex issue.

There is no doubt, that shrinking habitats are a threat to biodiversity, in terms of both
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plants
and
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animals
.
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Many
species such as blue whales, orangutan or gorillas are on the verge of extinction,
also
a tremendous number of
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plants
are endangered
and need protection if they are to survive. Ecologists and organizations are taking the lead to rescue fauna and flora of our planet, together with
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people
who
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help
them by making donations. As scientists say, climate
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changes
are at the forefront of factors that have a significant impact on wildlife.

The Earth's temperature is rising, causing huge damage to
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people
, species and ecosystem. Global warming causes theming of ice caps, droughts in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
regions and intensive weather anomalies. Unless it
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stops
, future
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changes
can be irreversible.
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Some
of them are
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seen
right
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now
. Bushfires in Australia are destroying properties, forests and are killing
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people
and millions of
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animals
. Rising temperatures are the reason, why these fires are more frequent and harder to
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stop
.

Another
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environmental
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issue
is overpopulation that may lead to a lack of drinkable
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water
supplies. The bigger world population is, the more pressure is putting on depleting resources. In the future, safe
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water
may become an
increasingly
precious commodity, leading to
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issues
of
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water
security.
Also
, global warming is a factor causing that we are running out of its drinkable supplies.

Doubtless, our environment is in real
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danger and
we
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have to
take the lead for climate action to build a more resilient future for
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people
and nature. To my mind,
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problems
such as global warming and overpopulation resulting in shrinking drinkable
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water
supplies are most alerting
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issues
. The loss of
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many
species of
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plants
and
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animals
is
also
an
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important
one,
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but
I cannot
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agree
that this is the main
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environmental
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
these days.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others says that there are more important environmental problems. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
397 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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