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Some people say that the main environment problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people say that the main environment problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 1
It is thought by many that the biggest environmental issues these days is the death of specific living creatures, while others think that there are bigger issues than that. In my opinion, I agree with the second opinion, because Plastic Waste and Global Warming are bigger threats to us. In the one hand, there are people who argue that losing particular kinds of plants or animals is the main threat. They have this opinion because the death of these species, for example, Flora, would mean the loss of the main food of a lot of living creatures. This will lead to eating unhealthy food for the majority of the species of animals and plants. Consequently, reducing their energy and activity during the day or night. To illustrate, if fish eat Flora or any kind of plants or even smaller fish that do not have the basic nutrients, they will become weaker and less active which will harm all the members of the food cycle and will affect all the pillars of the food pyramid of humans. In the other hand, Global Warming and Plastic Waste had been discussed by many to be more dangerous to the environment than anything else. This is due to Plastics do not dissolve easily. In other words, it would take hundreds of years for a plastic can to be dissolved completely, which will make any piece of plastic that attach to a tree, plant or sea creature, reduces the amount of Oxygen needed or inhibit the movement or feeding process, which may eventually kill this poor creature. Global Warming is no less of an importance either. It leads to a lot of serious problems worldwide that harm the environment and its well being. For instance, it causes the death of thousands of ocean fish every summer when the sea level shrinks in the east of Asia. To conclude, while the death of specific species (like Flora) is a big problem nowadays, I think Plastic Waste and Global Warming are the biggest issues here. We have to confront these two major threats first, then deal with the killing of different kinds of living creatures.
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thought
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that the biggest environmental issues these days is the death of specific living
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creatures
, while others
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think
that there are bigger issues than that. In my opinion, I
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agree
with the second opinion,
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because
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Plastic
Waste and
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Global
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Warming
are bigger threats to us.

In the one hand, there are
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people
who argue that losing particular kinds of
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plants
or animals is the main threat. They have this opinion
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because
the death of these species,
for example
, Flora, would mean the loss of the main
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food
of
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a lot of
living
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creatures
. This will lead to eating unhealthy
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food
for the majority of the species of animals and
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plants
.
Consequently
, reducing their energy and activity during the day or night. To illustrate, if fish eat Flora or any kind of
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plants
or even smaller fish that do not have the basic nutrients, they will become weaker and less active which will harm all the members of the
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food
cycle and will affect all the pillars of the
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food
pyramid of humans.

In the other hand,
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Global
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Warming
and
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Plastic
Waste had
been discussed
by
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many
to be more
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dangerous
to the environment than anything else. This is due to
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Plastics
do not dissolve
easily
.
In other words
, it would take hundreds of years for a
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plastic
can to
be dissolved
completely, which will
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make
any piece of
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plastic
that attach to a tree,
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plant
or sea
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creature
,
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reduces
the amount of Oxygen needed or inhibit the movement or feeding process, which may
eventually
kill this poor
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creature
.
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Global
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Warming
is no less of an importance either. It leads to
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a lot of
serious problems worldwide that harm the environment and its
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well being
.
For instance
, it causes the death of thousands of ocean fish every summer when the sea level shrinks in the east of Asia.

To conclude
, while the death of specific species (like Flora) is a
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big
problem nowadays, I
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think
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Plastic
Waste and
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Global
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Warming
are the biggest issues here. We
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have to
confront these two major threats
first
, then deal with the killing of
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different
kinds of living
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creatures
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the main environment problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
8.5
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