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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v. 155 v.64

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion? v. 155 v. 64
Music is the soul of life. People proclaim that music is a good way of connecting people of different values and even ages I totally concur with the view that music goes beyond boundaries to bind the society at various levels. This essay will explain as to why music helps build strong bonds between various multicultural as well as between people of varied ages? First and foremost, Music is not only a stress buster, but of late it is instrumental in bringing people of various cultures enjoying any and every kind of numbers which seem to bring everyone onto the dance floors or it is a euphonious song pleasant to the ears. Regardless of the fact, that the language may not understood by many. Still, music which is built on rhythm and cadence tends to touch the souls of people. Take for example, the number Dispacito, despite it being a Spanish song is has become an international rage. Although many people of late aren’t able to interpret the song they sway with the rhythm of this catchy song. Secondly, Music can make the society bind beyond the ages. Of late old, so many old, so many old tunes and evergreen song of yesteryears songs have been remixed to help establish a connect with the youngsters and the youth currently seem to be humming and enjoying the old songs as they come with a lot of soulful music. Take for illustration of late, many old people in the UK are also enrolling for contemporary music classes like Rock, Jazz, Hip-Hop and even techno. For it comes with a sea of benefits, like it keeps them happy, moreover it keeps them off chronic diseases like Alzheimer, Dementia Depression etc. To sum up, Music can influence the world to come under one roof. Music can end of a lot of animosity between people of different faiths as music can play the role of an antidote in today’s world.
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different
values and even ages I
totally
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goes beyond boundaries to bind the society at various levels. This essay will
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explain
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music
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helps
build strong bonds between various multicultural
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people
of varied ages?

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and foremost,
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is not
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buster,
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of
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late
it is instrumental in bringing
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people
of various cultures enjoying any and every kind of numbers which seem to bring everyone onto the dance floors or it is
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euphonious song pleasant to the ears. Regardless of the fact, that the language may not
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by
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.
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,
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music
which
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on rhythm and cadence tends to touch the souls of
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people
. Take
for example
, the number
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Dispacito
, despite it being a Spanish song is has become an international rage.
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aren’t able to interpret the song they sway with the rhythm of this catchy song.

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,
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can
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make
the society bind beyond the ages. Of
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,
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,
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tunes and evergreen song of
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yesteryears
songs have
been remixed
to
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help
establish
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a connect
with the youngsters and the youth
currently
seem to be humming and enjoying the
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old
songs as they
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with
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a lot of
soulful
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music
. Take for illustration of
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late
,
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many
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old
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people
in the UK are
also
enrolling for contemporary
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music
classes like Rock, Jazz, Hip-Hop and even techno. For it
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comes
with a sea of benefits, like it
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keeps
them happy,
moreover
it
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keeps
them off chronic diseases like Alzheimer, Dementia Depression etc.

To sum up,
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can influence the world to
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come
under one roof.
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can
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end
of
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a lot of
animosity between
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people
of
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different
faiths as
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music
can play the role of an antidote in
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today
’s world.
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IELTS essay Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion? v. 155 v. 64

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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