Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. v. 150 v.59

Many people believe music, being one of muses, to have a unique ability of connecting people with eachother, no matter their beliefs, cultures or age. I find myself a strong advocate of that assumption and I would like to present my views on this matter in the following paragraphs of this essay. Music is universal language to all and every person in the world may enjoy it, as their mother tongue is of no relevance. A Russian may find common ground with Puertorican while conversing over a new album of U2, at that paritcular moment, the differences in religion or politics just fade away. Therefore, music knows no boundres and has unique value of being universal to us all, a value that nothing else in the world has. Another important aspect is the timelessness of music, the fact that it does not age, at least in practical manner of speaking. Almost like a temporal tunnel connecting different generations and the century in which they were brought up are of no importance. As a result, a 20- year old grandchild might find a lot in common with his 80- year old grandparent, as they argue over the best track on Abbey road by The Beatles. Moreover, they may grow together even closer in the future and I find that wonderful. All in all, I consider music one of the most important inventions and factors allowing people, form different parts of the world and different times, come toghether. I can not think of anything as beautiful, transparent and universal as music, the undoubted queen of arts.
Many
people
believe
music
, being one of muses, to have a unique ability of connecting
people
with
eachother
, no matter their beliefs, cultures or age. I
find
myself a strong advocate of that assumption and I would like to present my views on this matter in the following paragraphs of this essay.

Music is universal language to all and every person in the world may enjoy it, as their mother tongue is of no relevance. A Russian may
find
common ground with
Puertorican
while conversing over a new album of U2, at that
paritcular
moment, the differences in religion or politics
just
fade away.
Therefore
,
music
knows no
boundres
and has unique value of being universal to us all, a value that nothing else in the world has.

Another
important
aspect is the timelessness of
music
, the fact that it does not age, at least in practical manner of speaking. Almost like a temporal tunnel connecting
different
generations and the century in which they
were brought
up are of no importance.
As a result
, a 20- year
old
grandchild might
find
a lot in common with his 80- year
old
grandparent, as they argue over the best
track
on
Abbey road
by The Beatles.
Moreover
, they may grow together even closer in the future and I
find
that wonderful.

All in all, I consider
music
one of the most
important
inventions and factors allowing
people
, form
different
parts of the world and
different
times,
come
toghether
. I can not
think
of anything as
beautiful
, transparent and universal as
music
, the undoubted queen of arts.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts