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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.37

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion? v. 37
Music is playing various roles in our daily life. Some people proclaim that music can connect different cultures and ages people. I completely agree that music is not limited by culture and generation. To begin with, music is an international language that everyone can feel and know it through listening. Since different countries have different habits, lifestyle and beliefs, it difficult for us to learn about other’s culture under language problem. Thus, music would not have those problems. Even we do not know the speech of other countries, we still can feel their culture via rhyme and flow. For example, there are Spanish songs “Despacito” which is very famous in a few years ago. Although most of the people didn’t know about the meaning of the lyrics, the rhythm and melody let the people feel the enthusiasm of Spain. Then, music not only can bond with different culture but also different ages. Nowadays as the development of music became complete, there are many young songs remixed with different old music style, vice versa. For example, we always can see that there are many elderly dances with some new style of music. Moreover, there are many programs for the elderly to learn how to remix the music with some new style. It can prove that music broke the restriction between different generation and associate different ages of people. To sum up, music is not limited by anything and playing an assorted role in our daily life. It not only associates different cultures people but also bond with different ages of people together.
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proclaim that
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music
can connect
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different
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cultures
and
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ages
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people
. I completely
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music
is not limited by
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culture
and generation.

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begin
with,
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music
is an international language that everyone can feel and
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know
it through listening. Since
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different
countries have
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different
habits, lifestyle and beliefs,
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it
difficult for us to learn about other’s
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culture
under language problem.
Thus
,
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music
would not have those problems. Even we do not know the speech of other countries, we
still
can feel their
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culture
via rhyme and flow.
For example
, there are Spanish songs “
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Despacito
” which is
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very
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in a few years ago. Although most of the
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people
didn’t know about the meaning of the lyrics, the rhythm and melody
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let
the
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people
feel the enthusiasm of Spain.

Then,
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music
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can bond with
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different
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culture
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also
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different
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ages
. Nowadays as the development of
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music
became complete, there are
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many
young songs remixed with
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different
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old
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music
style, vice versa.
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, we always can
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see
that there are
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elderly dances with
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some
new style of
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music
.
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, there are
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many
programs for the elderly to learn how to remix the
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music
with
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some
new style. It can prove that
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music
broke the restriction between
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different
generation and associate
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different
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ages
of
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people
.

To sum up,
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music
is not limited by anything and playing an assorted role in our daily life. It not
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only
associates
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different
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cultures
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people
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but
also
bond with
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different
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ages
of
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people
together.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion? v. 37

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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