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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion. v. 34

Music is sole of life. A vast majority of peoples believe that it plays a vital role in this modern world, when it comes to getting rid of ethnic and age differences. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the statement and in this essay I will show it with examples. Firstly, music is not only a stress buster, or a relaxing agent, but of late it has proven to play an integral part in connecting different people's around the globe. Take an example of an event named "Tomorrow Land". It is a seven day musical event in which people of different cultures, customs and from different parts come and enjoy together at given place they stay together for the next seven days straight. In addition to this, melody requires no language. Language might not be understood by many, but still the rhythm and passion on which it is built would touch people's soul. Secondly, music can make society blind beyond the ages. Older songs when combined with soothing tones are enjoyed and loved by many youngsters. They are often seemed to hum those old songs. Take for an instance "coke studio" as an example. It's a Pakistani local music-show in which youngsters from this age are asked to sing the songs from an older era. This show recreates the older songs in such a way that these are loved by many people of different ages. In conclusion, music has the power to influence the people to come together under one roof and enjoy together regardless of age and ethnic differences.

IELTS essay Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. v.34

Music
is sole of life. A vast majority of
peoples
believe that it plays a vital role in this modern world, when it
comes
to getting rid of ethnic and
age
differences. In my opinion, I
strongly
agree
with the statement and in this essay I will
show
it with examples.

Firstly
,
music
is not
only
a
stress
buster, or a relaxing agent,
but
of late it has proven to play an integral part in connecting
different
people
's around the globe. Take an example of an
event
named
"
Tomorrow Land
"
. It is a
seven day
musical
event
in which
people
of
different
cultures, customs and from
different
parts
come
and enjoy together at
given
place they stay together for the
next
seven days straight.
In addition
to this, melody requires no language. Language might not
be understood
by
many
,
but
still
the rhythm and passion on which it
is built
would touch
people
's soul.

Secondly
,
music
can
make
society blind beyond the
ages
. Older songs when combined with soothing tones
are enjoyed
and
loved
by
many
youngsters. They are
often
seemed to hum those
old
songs. Take for an instance
"
coke studio
"
as an example. It's a Pakistani local music-
show
in which youngsters from this
age
are asked
to sing the songs from an older era. This
show
recreates the older songs in such a way that these are
loved
by
many
people
of
different
ages.

In conclusion
,
music
has the power to influence the
people
to
come
together under one roof and enjoy together regardless of
age
and ethnic differences.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resources: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
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