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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.26

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion? v. 26
No one can deny that music plays an essential role in individuals' lives. For that reason, many people claim that people from various backgrounds and ages as well, come together when they listen to music. However, I wholeheartedly believe that music unites all parts of the world owing to their wide use. On the one hand, many people agree with this statement for many notewirthy reasons. The most remarkable is that singers create music for all categories of people, regardless of their age, or nationality. Therefore, they end up listening to the same music and learn another culture than their own. Besides this, they start having great relationships. Another key reason is that lyrincs empathyse with listeners' thoughts and experiences. For example, one famous singer from my country gathers hordes of people on his live concerts, even foreigners enjoy coming as the story of the song is impressive and overwhelming. Thus, people join similar music because they have similar likings. On the other hand, there are also some individuals who prefer to listen only to their traditional music. For instance, the older generation does not fancy modern music, suck as, pop or rock music due to fast motion and way of dancing. As a consequence, it is widely believed that local music encounters only elderly people's tastes. Nevertheless, they still exchange different cultures because people from abroad come to visit other countries aand without doubt they listen to music. Apart from that, on youtube and other online websites, there is a variety of music from different countries. All in all, when all specific reasons and relevant examples are considered and evaluated, I strongly agree with the idea supporting that people from different cultures and age come together because of the songs and lyrincs that are created.
No one can deny that
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music
plays an essential role in individuals'
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lives
. For that
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reason
,
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many
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people
claim that
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people
from various backgrounds and ages
as well
,
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come
together when they listen to
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music
.
However
, I
wholeheartedly
believe that
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music
unites all parts of the world owing to their wide
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use
.

On the one hand,
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many
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people
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agree
with this statement for
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many
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notewirthy
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reasons
. The most remarkable is that singers create
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music
for all categories of
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people
, regardless of their age, or nationality.
Therefore
, they
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end
up listening to the same
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music
and learn another culture than their
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own
.
Besides
this, they
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start
having great relationships. Another key
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reason
is that
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lyrincs
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empathyse
with listeners' thoughts and experiences.
For example
, one
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famous
singer from my country gathers hordes of
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people
on his
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live
concerts, even foreigners enjoy coming as the story of the song is impressive and overwhelming.
Thus
,
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people
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join
similar
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music
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because
they have similar
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likings
.

On the other hand
, there are
also
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some
individuals who prefer to listen
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only
to their traditional
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music
.
For instance
, the older generation does not fancy modern
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music
, suck as, pop or rock
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music
due to
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fast
motion and way of dancing. As a consequence, it is
widely
believed that local
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music
encounters
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only
elderly
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people
's tastes.
Nevertheless
, they
still
exchange
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different
cultures
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because
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people
from abroad
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come
to visit other countries
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aand
without doubt they listen to
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music
. Apart from that, on
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youtube
and other online websites, there is a variety of
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music
from
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different
countries.

All in all, when all specific
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reasons
and relevant examples
are considered
and evaluated, I
strongly
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agree
with the
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idea
supporting that
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people
from
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different
cultures and age
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come
together
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because
of the songs and
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lyrincs
that
are created
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Learn a new language and get a new soul.
Czech Proverb

IELTS essay Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion? v. 26

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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