Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. v.21
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion. v. 21
Music, the collective wealth of all human beings, is an amazing access to gathering people all around the world together without barrier of the language. I totally believe that it can make us bond with each other all over the world.
As far as I am concerned, for one thing, music can produce emotional resonance among people. When we listened to the romantic music, it could conjure us up romantic relationship with others and elicit our sweet feeling, so we are likely to be immersed in it no matter our age, color or culture. Besides, if we listened to happy music, everyone's brain would secrete a specific chemical substance which can lighten our mood and make us relaxed and comfortable. Moreover, when gloomy melody played around us, we would be surrounded by the sad atmosphere, so that we could not help shedding our tears. Generally, our brain is programmed in the same way, so our similar feeling can bring people together in this world.
For another, music is a good instrument for building friendship with other people. Hobby is one of the reasons why people link with each other. For example, when we met a stranger also interested in music, then we would have more deeper conversation with him. So in the process of sharing our favorite songs and singers, our friendship will be built unawares.
In conclusion, no matter who you are and where you come from, music, which can yield spiritual bond with others and make us build close relationship, can gather people on earth together.
Music
, the collective wealth of all human beings, is
an amazing access
to gathering
people
all around the world together without barrier of the language. I
totally
believe that it can
make
us bond with each
other
all over the world.
As far as I
am concerned
, for one thing,
music
can produce emotional resonance among
people
. When we listened to the romantic
music
, it could conjure us up romantic relationship with others and elicit our sweet feeling,
so
we are likely to
be immersed
in it no matter our age, color or culture.
Besides
, if we listened to happy
music
, everyone's brain would secrete a specific chemical substance which can lighten our mood and
make
us relaxed and comfortable.
Moreover
, when gloomy melody played around us, we would
be surrounded
by the sad atmosphere,
so
that we could not
help
shedding our tears.
Generally
, our brain
is programmed
in the same way
,
so
our similar feeling can bring
people
together in this world.
For another,
music
is a
good
instrument for building friendship with
other
people
. Hobby is one of the reasons why
people
link with each
other
.
For example
, when we met a stranger
also
interested in
music
, then we would have
more deeper
conversation with him.
So
in the process of sharing our favorite songs and singers, our friendship will
be built
unawares.
In conclusion
, no matter who you are and where you
come
from,
music
, which can yield spiritual bond with others and
make
us build close relationship, can gather
people
on earth together.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes