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Some people believe tthat it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argues that it is better to try and improve such situations. v.2

Some people believe tthat it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argues that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 2
There are some opinions consider that the finest solution for people to face with struggles in life, for instance, having an unpleasant job or being in straitened circumstances, is to accept all of them. However, the others oppose that people should attempt to handle and make things better. To answer for the question of why there are so many people just accept the reality so easily, even when it gets tough and they have to suffer all of the unexpected things, are some possible reasons. Firstly, may there is the only solution also the best thing they can do at that time, is to accept. For example, an officer doesn’t feel pleased with the current job, but he really needs money for his mom’s operation so instead of quitting and finding a new job, he just simply chooses to stay because it is the best thing he can do. Secondly, some people just decide to go with the flow because they think that it is supposed to happen for reasons and may they learn something new along the journey. On the other hand, it is also mentioned the opposite respond to the bad situation is to try and improve it. Bad and good things happen to all of us. Unfortunately, it' s human nature to dwell on the bad ones. People become frustrated so trying to make things better is never a bad idea. In fact, it not only helps people get over the problems but also brings them motivation to deal with anything happens in life. From my perspective, I support the idea that people should try their best to get over a tough situation. But, in some cases, I agree that it is better to just accept adversities. When facing with problems, think of the best way to solve it. But what if it doesn’t work? Then just let it go, there is no need in figuring out a solution for those things, it just causes stress and take up your time. In conclusion, the most important thing when facing with a bad situation is to know when to ignore it and when to improve it. Thinking wisely brings the best solution.
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some
opinions consider that the finest
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solution
for
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people
to face with struggles in life,
for instance
, having an unpleasant job or being in straitened circumstances, is to
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accept
all of them.
However
, the others oppose that
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people
should attempt to handle and
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make
things better.

To answer for the question of why there are
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so
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many
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people
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just
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accept
the reality
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so
easily
, even when it
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gets
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tough and
they
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have to
suffer
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all of the
unexpected things, are
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some
possible reasons.
Firstly
, may there is the
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only
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solution
also
the
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best
thing they can do at that time, is to
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accept
.
For example
, an officer doesn’t feel
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pleased
with the
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current
job,
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but
he
really
needs money for his mom’s operation
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so
instead
of quitting and finding a new job, he
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just
simply
chooses to stay
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because
it is the
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best
thing he can do.
Secondly
,
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some
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people
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just
decide to
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go with
the flow
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because
they
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think
that it
is supposed
to happen for reasons and may they learn something new along the journey.

On the other hand
, it is
also
mentioned the opposite respond to the
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bad
situation is to
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try and
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improve
it.
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and
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good
things happen to all of us. Unfortunately,
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#039; s human nature to dwell on the
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bad
ones.
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People
become frustrated
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so
trying to
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make
things better is never a
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bad
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idea
. In fact, it not
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only
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helps
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people
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get
over the problems
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but
also
brings them motivation to deal with anything happens in life.

From my perspective, I support the
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idea
that
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people
should try their
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best
to
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get
over a tough situation.
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, in
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some
cases, I
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agree
that it is better to
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just
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accept
adversities. When facing with problems,
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think
of the
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best
way to solve it.
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But
what if it doesn’t work? Then
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just
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let
it go, there is no need in figuring out a
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solution
for those things, it
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just
causes
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stress
and take up your time.

In conclusion
, the most
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important
thing when facing with a
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bad
situation is to know when to
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ignore
it and when to
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improve
it. Thinking
wisely
brings the
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best
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solution
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe tthat it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argues that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
364 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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