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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory job or short of money. Others believe that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions. v.1

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory job or short of money. Others believe that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 1
People are now living on the cusp of industrial transformation with a hectic pace of city life and a plethora of difficult situations. To deal with these depressing circumstances, people are often confused whether they should accept or need to solve them. This essay attempts to provide ideas regard both these views and explain why the second way of thinking is much more beneficial. On the one hand, it is obvious that people who follow the first concept are likely to get a wholesome life. They admit the awful situations as one part of their life rather than either be dreadful of them or compare themselves with others; thereby they do not have a tendency to get anxiety disorders. Moreover, given that they are not obligated to spend time solving those challenges, they can enjoy themselves by savouring every moment of their daily life, such as spending more time with family, take up new interests, etc. However, this way of thinking can lead people to become laid-back human beings since they lose precious chances of upgrading their life conditions. On the other hand, it is undeniable that difficult situations and competitive thinking turn humans into a better version of themselves. Trying to deal with troublesome situations gives people opportunities to enhance their skills. For example, a manager can acquire experience and knowledge from solving previous severe flaw in operating tasks and avoid repeating it in the future. Furthermore, since people can boost their personal skills, they receive the admiration from others and stand a golden chance of promotion opportunities. Even if they are not capable of improving stressful situations, they have learned something such as how to productively organize work. Additionally, people can coincidentally change the rough circumstances and enjoy their life if they have logical schedule, thereby are not prone to get messy life. In the era of modern life, human beings need to face up with a tremendous amount of problems. It is better for people to be unsatisfied with these situations and try to solve them to improve their personal skills and life conditions than take a step back from the rat race.
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now
living on the cusp of industrial transformation with a hectic pace of city
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life
and a plethora of difficult
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situations
. To deal with these depressing circumstances,
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people
are
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often
confused whether they should accept or need to solve them. This essay attempts to provide
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ideas
regard both these views and
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explain
why the second way of thinking is much more beneficial.

On the one hand, it is obvious that
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people
who follow the
first
concept are likely to
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get
a wholesome
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life
. They admit the awful
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situations
as one part of their
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life
rather
than either be dreadful of them or compare themselves with others; thereby they do not have a tendency to
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get
anxiety disorders.
Moreover
,
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given
that they are not obligated to spend time solving those challenges, they can enjoy themselves by
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savouring
every moment of their daily
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life
, such as spending more time with family, take up new interests, etc.
However
, this way of thinking can lead
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people
to become laid-back human beings since they lose precious chances of upgrading their
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life
conditions.

On the other hand
, it is undeniable that difficult
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situations
and competitive thinking turn humans into a better version of themselves. Trying to deal with troublesome
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situations
gives
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people
opportunities to enhance their
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skills
.
For example
, a manager can acquire experience and knowledge from solving previous severe flaw in operating tasks and avoid repeating it in the future.
Furthermore
, since
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people
can boost their personal
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skills
, they receive the admiration from others and stand a golden chance of promotion opportunities. Even if they are not capable of improving stressful
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situations
, they have learned something such as how to
productively
organize work.
Additionally
,
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people
can
coincidentally
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change
the rough circumstances and enjoy their
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life
if they have logical schedule, thereby are not prone to
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get
messy life.

In the era of modern
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life
, human beings need to face up with a tremendous amount of problems. It is better for
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people
to
be unsatisfied
with these
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situations
and try to solve them to
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improve
their personal
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skills
and
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life
conditions than take a step back from the rat race.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory job or short of money. Others believe that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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