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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as unsatisfactory job and shortage of money. Others argue that it is best to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and state your opinion. v.2

There are conflicting views about whether people should accept a bad situation or make efforts to improve it. While there are some justifications for accepting certain bad situations, making an attempt to overcome the negatives may be a better solution. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument and express my view / perspective. On the other hand, people who insist that bad situations should be accepted tend to lack the courage to change their life. For example, many people who stick to a bad job are afraid of quitting. They do not like their job and yet they do not want to quit because they are afraid of the uncertain future. They are worried that they may have to stay jobless for a while and struggle to pay their bills before they can find employment again. Consequently, they accept the bad situation without making an effort to improve it. There are also some bad situations that are beyond our power to improve. For example, there is not much we can do to prevent a serious illness or the untimely death of a dear one. In such situations, coping with the loss or the negative situation is a better idea than brooding over it. On the other hand, there are certain situations that can be improved if we make an effort. For example, nobody has to suffer in a bad job when better jobs are available on the market. Of course, this might require learning a new skill or acquiring a qualification, but it is worth our while. Likewise, people suffering from poor health can see some visible improvements if they adopt an exercise routine and a healthy diet. Those in toxic relationships can regain their sanity by opting to break up. Obviously, there are several situations that can be improved with a little effort. Hence, the argument that all bad situations should be accepted without complaining does not hold water. In conclusion, this essay discussed that although people sometimes have reasonable excuses to live in a bad situation, it is beneficial to try to improve adverse circumstances. In my opinion, it is better to try to get out of the negatives.
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efforts
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justifications for accepting certain
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bad
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situations
, making an attempt to overcome the negatives may be a
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better
solution. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument and express my view / perspective.

On the other hand
,
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people
who insist that
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bad
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situations
should be
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accepted
tend to lack the courage to
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change
their
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life
.
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,
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many
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people
who stick to a
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bad
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job
are afraid of quitting. They do not like their
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job and
yet
they do not want to quit
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because
they are afraid of the uncertain future. They
are worried
that they may
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have to
stay jobless for a while and struggle to pay their bills
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before
they can find employment again.
Consequently
, they accept the
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bad
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situation
without making an
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effort
to
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improve
it. There are
also
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some
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bad
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situations
that are beyond our power to
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improve
.
For example
, there is not much we can do to
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prevent
a serious illness or the
untimely
death of a dear one. In such
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situations
, coping with the loss or the
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negative
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situation
is a
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better
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idea
than brooding over it.

On the other hand
, there are certain
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situations
that can be
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improved
if we
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make
an
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effort
.
For example
, nobody
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has to
suffer in a
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bad
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job
when
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better
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jobs
are available on the market.
Of course
, this might require learning a new
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skill
or acquiring a qualification,
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but
it is worth our while.
Likewise
,
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people
suffering from poor health can
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see
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some
visible improvements if they adopt an exercise routine and a healthy diet. Those in toxic relationships can regain their sanity by opting to break up.
Obviously
, there are several
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situations
that can be
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improved
with a
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little
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effort
.
Hence
, the argument that all
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bad
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situations
should be
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accepted
without complaining does not hold water.

In conclusion
, this essay discussed that although
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people
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sometimes
have reasonable excuses to
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live
in a
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bad
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situation
, it is beneficial to try to
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improve
adverse circumstances. In my opinion, it is
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better
to try to
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get
out of the negatives.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
363 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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