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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory of job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory of job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 2
The method of counteracting the worst episodes by people has become a mooted issue. Few intellectuals perceive that an individual should willingly mould himself with the surroundings, while others opine that one should adopt a lucrative approach to modify the existing situations by using hard work. This essay will discuss both the views of the above notion along with my opinion. To begin with, the former view, which suggests the conventional way to adjust with the difficult tasks. This approach is the most simple, effective and short run method to overcome the harshness of the life. Although, this approach is effective for short run, it reduces the conflicts between the people and provides the happiness to them. For instance, the impact of the problems regarding the scarcity of money and uncertainty at workplace could be curbed by accepting it and change the actions according to the situations. Thus, by accepting the worst situation, one could get an idea to live with that surroundings. On the other hand, the latter view is more optimistic; where, the people must have to put corrective actions to eradicate the sabotage episodes. This approach is not only encouraging a layman to live in degraded situations, but also motivate him to put efforts to change the current situation. Moreover, such approach of the scientists has introduced many innovations in our community. For example, the barriers of communication and the transportation were faded by using many inventions in the industrial age. As a result, the standard of living of the people has been improved. In conclusion, it is indeed that the necessity is the origin of the innovation. In my opinion, the latter view is more effective and productive for the people to enhance their life in a sustainable way. However, it is also good to accept a few things in our life, such as a scarcity of fossil fuel for the prosperity of the society.
The method of counteracting the worst episodes by
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people
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has
become a mooted issue. Few intellectuals perceive that an individual should
willingly
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mould
himself with the surroundings, while others opine that one should adopt a lucrative
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approach
to modify the existing
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situations
by using
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work. This essay will discuss both the
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views
of the above notion along with my opinion.

To
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begin
with, the former
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view
, which suggests the conventional way to adjust with the difficult tasks. This
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approach
is
This adjective uses the short comparatives form.
the most simple
, effective and short run method to overcome the harshness of the life. Although, this
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approach
is effective for short run, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
the conflicts between the
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people
and provides the happiness to them.
For instance
, the impact of the problems regarding the scarcity of money and uncertainty at workplace could
be curbed
by accepting it and
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change
the actions according to the
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situations
.
Thus
, by accepting the worst
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situation
, one could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with that surroundings.

On the other hand
, the latter
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view
is more optimistic; where, the
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
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have to
put corrective actions to eradicate the sabotage episodes. This
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approach
is not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
encouraging a layman to
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live
in degraded
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situations
,
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but
also
motivate him to put efforts to
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change
the
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current
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situation
.
Moreover
, such
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approach
of the scientists has introduced
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many
innovations in our community.
For example
, the barriers of communication and the transportation
were faded
by using
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
inventions in the industrial age.
As a result
, the standard of living of the
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people
has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
.

In conclusion
, it is
indeed
that the necessity is the origin of the innovation. In my opinion, the latter
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view
is more effective and productive for the
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people
to enhance their life
Consider replacing "in a sustainable way" with the adverb for "sustainable"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a sustainable way
.
However
, it is
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
to accept a few things in our life, such as a scarcity of fossil fuel for the prosperity of the society.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory of job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
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