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some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, others argue that it is better to try and improve such conditions. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v. 169 v.91

some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, others argue that it is better to try and improve such conditions. v. 169 v. 91
Satisfaction is good, but ambition is even better. While it's believed by some people that accepting a non-favourable condition, such as dissatisfaction with a job or lack of money is the best thing we can do about them, others, however, claim it would be a better solution to attempt enhancing those situations. This essay will argue why some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, but why, others argue that it is better to try and improve such conditions. Despite some challenges, coping with a bad situation sometimes offers the most appropriate solution. Moreover, we should agree that some things do not change no matter how hard we try. For instance, in Japan, companies offer to help those with special needs by finding them simple jobs because they know the chances are limited for them to perform sophisticated tasks. Therefore, dealing with something that is difficult to be changed is an acceptable compromise. On the contrary, we have to distinguish those circumstances that can be improved. Furthermore, it would provide us with opportunities to develop our skills that would have been otherwise impossible if we had only accepted what we currently have to deal with. For example, business pioneers all over the world were not born rich or successful. Consequently, having the wisdom and the courage to improve hard situations could be the key to change our life. In conclusion, satisfaction is a controversial topic whether we should adapt to rough circumstances or transform them. In fact, the essay argued why handling difficult conditions might be a good approach followed by some people, but why having the will to face such hardships till we overcome them is a better approach preferred by others. In my opinion, we should never be content with less than what we deserve and nothing cannot be changed.
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ambition is even
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better
. While it's believed by
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some
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people
that accepting a
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non-favourable
condition, such as dissatisfaction with a job or lack of money is the best thing we can do about them, others,
however
, claim it would be a
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better
solution to attempt enhancing those
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situations
. This essay will argue why
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some
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people
believe that it is best to accept a
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bad
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situation
,
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but
why, others argue that it is
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better
to
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try and
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improve
such conditions.

Despite
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some
challenges, coping with a
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bad
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situation
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sometimes
offers the most appropriate solution.
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, we should
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agree
that
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some
things do not
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change
no matter how
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hard
we try.
For instance
, in Japan,
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companies
offer to
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help
those with special needs by finding them simple jobs
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because
they know the chances
are limited
for them to perform sophisticated tasks.
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, dealing with something
that is
difficult to be
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changed
is an acceptable compromise.

On the contrary
, we
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have to
distinguish those circumstances that can be
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improved
.
Furthermore
, it would provide us with opportunities to develop our
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skills
that would have been
otherwise
impossible if we had
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only
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accepted
what we
currently
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have to
deal with.
For example
, business pioneers all over the world were not born rich or successful.
Consequently
, having the wisdom and the courage to
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improve
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hard
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situations
could be the key to
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change
our life.

In conclusion
, satisfaction is a controversial topic whether we should adapt to rough circumstances or transform them. In fact, the essay argued why handling difficult conditions might be a
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good
approach followed by
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some
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people
,
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but
why having the will to face such hardships till we overcome them is a
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better
approach preferred by others.
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In
my opinion, we should never be content with less than what we deserve and nothing cannot be
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changed
.
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8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, others argue that it is better to try and improve such conditions. v. 169 v. 91

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
8.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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