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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v. 158 v.82

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 158 v. 82
It is generally a contentious topic concerning whether welcoming or fixing an uncomfortable situation; for example, when someone has got a kind of hardship economy, is the preferable choice. In my own perspectives, the combination of these ways can help someone to tackle many sorts of undesirable conditions. Based on my knowledge and experiences, persons who choose to accept the fate that they have to undergo such a bad situation is due to they believe that good things might come out of it. Their solution is as simple as just always going with the flow wishing they will learn something new along the journey. For instance, when someone was refused or fired from their dreamed occupation, he just leftover it because there was nothing to do with that job again. His positive thinking brought the opinion that there will be something waiting out there as an unemployed person. However, he decided to let that profession without knowing the reasons, either if his rival betrayed him or hearing some suggestions to alleviate his weakness for his next improvements. On the other hand, there are groups who always try and improve to abandon whatever their shortcomings because they feel a bit paranoid that the situation will become worse if they do not do so. Imagine if there was a person from a low-income family, he was forced to live with limit money. Logically, he will worry at least one point, whereby he is likely to be a poorest human beings could be, such as only had an empty pocket with no food and should continue living in the streets or be a homeless person in a town. Regarding that matter, he figured out a solution to improvise such condition by getting an extra job as young as possible without thinking about his personal health. In conclusion, I believe that both arguments have their respective merits and drawbacks. By comparing both points of view, people should understand the situations have been together with enhancing their effort to take some positive reasons behind it and considering their capabilities in facing something unwelcome. Not all adverse conditions need to be ignored or to be too noticed since everything has its consequences; thus, the ideal ways are by accepting and fixing it on balance.
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generally
a contentious topic concerning whether welcoming or fixing an uncomfortable
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situation
;
for example
, when someone has
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got
a kind of hardship economy, is the preferable choice. In my
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own
perspectives, the combination of these ways can
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help
someone to tackle
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many
sorts of undesirable conditions.

Based on my knowledge and experiences,
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persons
who choose to accept the fate that they
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have to
undergo such a
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bad
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situation
is due to they believe that
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good
things might
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come
out of it. Their solution is as simple as
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just
always going with the flow wishing they will learn something new along the journey.
For instance
, when someone
was refused
or fired from their dreamed occupation, he
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just
leftover it
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because
there was nothing to do with that job again. His
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positive
thinking brought the opinion that there will be something waiting out there as an unemployed
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person
.
However
, he decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
that profession without knowing the reasons, either if his rival betrayed him or hearing
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some
suggestions to alleviate his weakness for his
next
improvements.

On the other hand
, there are groups who always
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try and
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improve
to abandon whatever their shortcomings
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because
they feel a bit paranoid that the
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situation
will become worse if they do not do
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so
. Imagine if there was a
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person
from a low-income family, he
was forced
to
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live
with limit money.
Logically
, he will worry at least one point, whereby he is likely to be
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a
poorest human beings could be, such as
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only
had an empty pocket with no food and should continue living in the streets or be a homeless
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person
in a town. Regarding that matter, he figured out a solution to improvise such condition by getting an extra job as young as possible without thinking about his personal health.

In conclusion
, I believe that both arguments have their respective merits and drawbacks. By comparing both points of view,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should understand the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
situations
have been together with enhancing their effort to take
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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positive
reasons behind it and considering their capabilities in facing something unwelcome. Not all adverse conditions need to be
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ignored
or to be too noticed since everything has its consequences;
thus
, the ideal ways are by accepting and fixing it on balance.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 158 v. 82

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8.5
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