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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.8

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 8
In recent years, many people are in bad situations such as an unsatisfactory job or low salary. When lots of people face a struggling situation, some people choose to accept the situation and some people not. The essay is aimed to argue why people should try their best to get out of a bad situation and improve themselves in a better position. A bad situation will influence people negatively. Firstly, people stay in a terrible environment where they can't get any positive feedback such as low salary, they will feel unconfidently and doubt if their jobs make sense. What's more, This mental negative emotion will react to their physical. For instance, when people do something they like, they will feel the time fly by, but it's really struggling for those who do the jobs they don't like. Thus, For those who are in a bad situation, they will be tired after they finish their work without any good feedback. Secondly, set a goal is helpful to achieve ideal life. People could get more passion after they set a goal to get rid of a bad situation. It could help them get their confidence again and concentrate on their work. Although some people couldn't get positive feedback from their occupation, they could still be more skilled and chilled to face a hard situation and worthy of a new satisfactory job. In contract, It seems that a person could be more skilful when in a high-pressure situation. The bad situation could practise a person's skills to solve problems. For example, if a person can face many difficulties they could do better when they are in a better situation. Thus, sometimes a bad situation does make sense. To summarise, a bad situation may take some advantages to people. However, it will take more disadvantages. Everyone is worthy of a good life. A good situation can make people find a high salary job and get close to their ideal lives.
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people
face a struggling
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,
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choose to accept the
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not. The essay
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people
should try their best to
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get
out of a
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improve
themselves in a better position.

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negatively
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people
stay in a terrible environment where they can't
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get
any
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positive
feedback such as low salary, they will feel
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and doubt if their
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jobs
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make
sense. What's more, This mental
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negative
emotion will react to their physical.
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do something they like, they will feel the time
fly
by,
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jobs
they don't like.
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situation
, they will
be tired
after they finish their work without any
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good
feedback.
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could
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get
more passion after they set a goal to
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rid of a
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. It could
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help
them
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their confidence again and concentrate on their work. Although
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couldn't
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get
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positive
feedback from their occupation, they could
still
be more skilled and chilled to face a
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hard
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situation
and worthy of a new satisfactory job.

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skilful
when in a high-pressure
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. The
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could
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a person's
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skills
to solve problems.
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difficulties they could do better when they are in a better
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.
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sense.

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may take
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advantages to
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.
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good
life. A
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good
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can
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make
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people
find a high salary
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and
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get
close to their ideal
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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