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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v. 155 v.79

There is often a controversy about whether one should try to improve the unpleasent situations like lack of finances or undesireble job conditions, or accept them. Changing lifestyle and seeking new experiences is always related with risks. But, alongside with risks, changes suggest the new opportunities which othen results in a great success. Many people accept the bad situations due to the fear of failure. A new job comes with the new obligations and responsibilities, which threatens a lot of person, especially those with the low self-confidence. If such people appear in unsatisfactory enviroment, they prefer to fit in, rather then to escape and find new ways. Another reason for such acceptance can be a lack of alternatives. They simply do not have enough qualification to try new things or have a lot to loose in case their endavours are unsucssesful. For example, single moms have the responsibilities toward their children, so they can not take a shot and leave their jobs, because if they are unable to find new occupation, their families can be left without food. It is undeniable that taking the new challenges is vital for development and achieving the favourable outcome. Person who works hard and does not give up on his dreams, is often rewarded with positive results. On the contrary, if one does not take a chanse and try to improve will be at the same position for the whole life. Furthermore, trying new things open up new opportunities and this improvement continues endlessly. In my opinion, it is better to try to modify the unwilling situations despite of the fact, that such attempts may consist some risks.

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often
 a controversy about whether one should try to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
 the Possible spelling mistake found.unpleasant
unpleasent
 situations like lack of finances or Possible spelling mistake found.undesirable
undesireble
 job conditions, or accept them. Changing lifestyle and seeking You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlatedifferentstate-of-the-artmodernunusualunfamiliar
new
 experiences is always related with This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :hazardsdangers
risks
. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
, alongside with This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :hazardsdangers
risks
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
 suggest the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlatedifferentstate-of-the-artmodernunusualunfamiliar
new
 opportunities which Possible spelling mistake found.othertheno thenOthón
othen
 results in a great success.

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Many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 accept the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evil
bad
 situations due to the fear of failure. A You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlatedifferentstate-of-the-artmodernunusualunfamiliar
new
 job This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approachesarrives
comes
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new
 obligations and responsibilities, which threatens Possible agreement error. The noun person seems to be countable; consider using: “a lot of people”, “a lot of persons”.a lot of peoplea lot of persons
a lot of person
, especially
 those with the low self-confidence. If such This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 appear in unsatisfactory Possible spelling mistake found.environment
enviroment
, they prefer to fit in, rather
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then
 to escape and find You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlatedifferentstate-of-the-artmodernunusualunfamiliar
new
 ways. Another reason for such acceptance can be a lack of alternatives. They simply
 do not have This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
enough
 qualification to try You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlatedifferentstate-of-the-artmodernunusualunfamiliar
new
 things or have a lot to Did you mean “lose” (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?lose
loose
 in case their Possible spelling mistake found.endeavors
endavours
 are Possible spelling mistake found.unsuccessful
unsucssesful
. For example
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so
 they can not take a shot and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :depart
leave
 their jobs, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 if they are unable to find You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlatedifferentstate-of-the-artmodernunusualunfamiliar
new
 occupation, their families can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departed
left
 without food.

It is undeniable that taking the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlatedifferentstate-of-the-artmodernunusualunfamiliar
new
 challenges is vital for development and achieving the Possible spelling mistake. ‘favourable’ is British English.favorable
favourable
 outcome. Person who works This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
 and does not give up on his dreams, is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:frequently
often
 rewarded with This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
positive
 results. On the contrary
, if one does not take a Possible spelling mistake found.changechancechaseChaseChancechaise
chanse
 and try to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
 will be at the same position for the whole life. Furthermore
, trying You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlatedifferentstate-of-the-artmodernunusualunfamiliar
new
 things open up You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlatedifferentstate-of-the-artmodernunusualunfamiliar
new
 opportunities and this improvement continues endlessly
.

In my opinion, it is better to try to modify the unwilling situations Did you mean “despite” (or, alternatively, ‘in spite of’)?despite
despite of
 the fact, that such attempts may consist This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :hazardsdangers
risks
. 