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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v. 154 v.78

Different people have different problems in their lives and everyone has his own perspective to tackle the situation. While some prefer to accept their awful conditions, such as impoverishment, others put effort to ameliorate their present. This essay will juxtapose both these views, and will finally end with my opinion. Some people decide to stay in an awful situation because they are not ready to accept any transitions. They do not want to come out of their comfort zone to explore something new. For instance, one of my colleagues does not like his night shift job, but he neither wants to discuss about it with his supervisors, nor switch his job as that requires and extra effort of attending multiple interviews and studying for them. Such people would prefer fidgeting about their conditions, rather than taking some actions to improve it. On the contrary, some people go against all odds and achieve according to their calibre. They believe that they can either make or break their life. Moreover, they do not want to blame others for their condition and they do not want to regret in their future for not trying to get what they actually deserve. For example, my father wanted my brother to become a doctor, however he was interested in pursuing his passion of becoming a wildlife photographer. He went against all odds and fought for what he actually wanted and was able to convince my father. Consequently, he is an adept in his field now and my father is extremely satisfied with him. In conclusion, some individuals prefer accepting their rough situation as they are afraid of any changes in their lives and others prefer fighting with such conditions as they want to put effort. In my opinion, the latter ones have a better perspective as by putting hard work they can rely on themselves rather than anyone else or their fate.
Different
people
have
different
problems in their
lives
and everyone has his
own
perspective to tackle the situation. While
some
prefer
to accept their awful conditions, such as impoverishment, others put effort to ameliorate their present. This essay will juxtapose both these views, and will
finally
end
with my opinion.

Some
people
decide to stay in an awful situation
because
they are not ready to accept any transitions. They do not
want
to
come
out of their comfort zone to explore something new.
For instance
, one of my colleagues does not like his night shift job,
but
he neither
wants
to
discuss about it
with his supervisors, nor switch his job as that requires and extra effort of attending multiple interviews and studying for them. Such
people
would
prefer
fidgeting about their conditions,
rather
than taking
some
actions to
improve
it.

On the contrary
,
some
people
go against all odds and achieve according to their
calibre
. They believe that they can either
make
or break their life.
Moreover
, they do not
want
to blame others for their
condition and
they do not
want
to regret in their future for not trying to
get
what they actually deserve.
For example
, my father wanted my brother to become a doctor,
however
he
was interested
in pursuing his passion of becoming a wildlife photographer. He went against all odds and fought for what he actually wanted and was able to convince my father.
Consequently
, he is an adept in his field
now
and my father is
extremely
satisfied with him.

In conclusion
,
some
individuals
prefer
accepting their rough situation as they are afraid of any
changes
in their
lives
and others
prefer
fighting with such conditions as they
want
to put effort. In my opinion, the latter ones have a better perspective as by putting
hard
work they can rely on themselves
rather
than anyone else or their fate.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Give reason and examples

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