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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v. 153 v.77

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 153 v. 77
It is believed that some people need to accept their life, even in a bad situation such as the not satisfactory job and get a small amount of salary. Others argue that they need to try their best to improve themselves in such situation. This essay will be discussed both view of this issue and I will give my opinion on the matter. On the one hand, some people choose to accept all the situations that happen in the life and find ways to adapt to them. To begin with the fact is that people in the society who do not have the education qualification or thinking lead to they have the right to choose a job which they like, they have to accept work that they do not satisfy and will receive low wages. For example, many people have to suffer from physical health to work as a porter to earn more income, even though I know they are not interested in it. In addition, adapting to all the situation, they must find ways to reduce their daily expenses to suit their income. On the other hand, although there are a significant number of bad situations, some residents choose to try to improve themselves to have a better life. Initially, they try to find more job opportunities and they can learn from successful people to have a better job. Besides, they can also earn how to use the technology devices to sell the product online which helps to increase their personal income. For instance, people suffer from diseases such as cancer that can lead to the death and those patients believe that they would have a chance to increase the health to live longer. To sum up, instead of accepting the bad situations, they need to have a positive thinking to pass and improve the unbelievable moment in the life.
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that
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need to accept their
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life
, even in a
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bad
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situation
such as the not satisfactory
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job
and
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get
a
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small
amount of salary. Others argue that they need to try their best to
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improve
themselves in such
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situation
. This essay will
be discussed
both view of this issue and I will give my opinion on the matter.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
choose to accept all the
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situations
that happen in the
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life
and find ways to adapt to them. To
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begin
with the fact is that
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people
in the society who do not have the education qualification or thinking lead to they have the right to choose a
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job
which they like, they
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have to
accept work that they do not satisfy and will receive low wages.
For example
,
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many
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people
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have to
suffer from physical health to work as a porter to earn more income,
even though
I know they are not interested in it.
In addition
, adapting to all the
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situation
, they
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must
find ways to
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reduce
their daily expenses to suit their income.

On the other hand
, although there are a significant number of
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bad
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situations
,
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some
residents choose to try to
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improve
themselves to have a better
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life
.
Initially
, they try to find more
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job
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opportunities and
they can learn from successful
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people
to have a better
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job
.
Besides
, they can
also
earn how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the technology devices to sell the product online which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to increase their personal income.
For instance
,
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people
suffer from diseases such as cancer that can lead to the death and those patients believe that they would have a chance to increase the health to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
longer.

To sum up,
instead
of accepting the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
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situations
, they need to have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
thinking to pass and
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improve
the unbelievable moment in the
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life
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 153 v. 77

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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