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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that, it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v. 151 v.75

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that, it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 151 v. 75
These days, people want to increase their skills in daily life. Because of the money to live in their family is thinking of a better situation. What is the most effective method for dealing with that unsatisfactory for earning a monthly salary? In this essay, I will agree to support my opinions with examples. First of all, a lack of money is facing the problem of peoples. After graduation, students are trouble with cash, but there are not enough having in their pockets. There was asking parents while he is doing the post, so many members are affected. For example, Kluniversity is important that are paying the high cost of the semester fee, yet do not satisfy placements in the college. If the government needs to donate they can study to get a post. Secondly, members are resigning from a bad impression of a work that needs more money. There are doing discussions about the shortage of salary for the monthly balance rather than much of work in the company. To illustrate, Wipro is one of the largest companies in the world. This are recruiting for many people to get unsatisfied. If there were keeping some rules and regulations. In conclusion, although it is a common belief that job, whether they need a better situation to improve career with, argue other peoples. I believe that the shortage of salary in the month to effects occurs students only. I think that to remove a job doing in the company such as disappointing.
These days,
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people
want to increase their
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skills
in daily life.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
of the money to
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live
in their family is thinking of a better situation. What is the most effective method for dealing with that unsatisfactory for earning a monthly salary? In this essay, I will
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agree
to support my opinions with examples.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, a lack of money is facing the problem of
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peoples
. After graduation, students are trouble with cash,
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but
there are not
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enough
having in their pockets. There was asking parents while he is doing the post,
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so
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many
members are
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affected
.
For example
,
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Kluniversity
is
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important
that are paying the high cost of the semester fee,
yet
do not satisfy placements in the college.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
needs to donate they can study to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a post.

Secondly
, members are resigning from a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
impression of a work that needs more money. There are doing discussions about the shortage of salary for the monthly balance
rather
than much of work in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. To illustrate,
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Wipro
is one of the largest
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companies
in the world.
The verb 'are' is plural. Did you mean "these are", "This is" or "This was"?
This are
recruiting for
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many
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people
to
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get
unsatisfied. If there were keeping
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some
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rules
and regulations.

In conclusion
, although it is a common belief that job, whether they need a better situation to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
career with, argue other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
peoples
. I believe that the shortage of salary in the month to effects occurs students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that to remove a job doing in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
such as disappointing.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that, it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 151 v. 75

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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