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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v. 148 v.72

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 148 v. 72
Every coin has two sides. To accept an undesirable event or to do your best to change it is the current contention. In my opinion, we not only need to take on the awful incident, but also need to analyse it and make a wise decision about to overcome it or not. To embrace an unpleasant situation may not an adverse thing because it is likely to bring you some benefits. For example, the university I dreamed turned me down while another one that was my second option sent me an offer with a scholarship. Disappointed as I am, to accept the second one means I would save a large amount of tuition fee. Thus, the unfavourable thing can bring some benefits and it depends on how you judge it. However, an alternative method is to persevere with my dream and never give up. To achieve it means I have to study at the High School one more year to gain satisfactory grades so that I have a chance to enter my desirable university. Besides, it means that my family has to afford one more year tuition fee if I choose to study again. In such a scenario, the preferable option I think is to go to the university that is not my first choice because I can save money and time. In conclusion, to make a wise decision variously needs to consider its specific conditions. As I mentioned before, whether to accept or challenge the circumstance depends on how you examine it as we have to live with imperfection.
Every coin has two sides. To accept an undesirable
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event
or to do your best to
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change
it is the
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current
contention. In my opinion, we not
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only
need to take on the awful incident,
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but
also
need to
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analyse
it and
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make
a wise decision about to overcome it or not.

To embrace an unpleasant situation may not an adverse thing
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because
it is likely to bring you
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some
benefits.
For example
, the university I dreamed turned me down while another one that was my second option
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
me an offer with a scholarship. Disappointed as I am, to accept the second one means I would save a large amount of tuition fee.
Thus
, the
Possible spelling mistake. 'unfavourable' is British English.
unfavourable
thing can bring
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some
benefits and it depends on how you judge it.

However
, an alternative method is to persevere with my dream and never give up. To achieve it means I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
study at the High School one more year to gain satisfactory grades
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I have a chance to enter my desirable university.
Besides
, it means that my family
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
afford one more year tuition fee if I choose to study again. In such a scenario, the preferable option I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
is to go to the university
that is
not my
first
choice
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I can save money and time.

In conclusion
, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a wise decision
variously
needs to consider its specific conditions. As I mentioned
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
, whether to accept or challenge the circumstance depends on how you examine it as we
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with imperfection.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 148 v. 72

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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