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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v. 143 v.67

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 143 v. 67
People often have a perception that accepting bad situations is good in certain circumstances, whereas others believe that such situations must be improved through our efforts. In my viewpoint, I would suggest that a person should work hard and enhance the situations rather than getting habitual to the things. On one hand, people always try to accept bad situations, thinking that the good times are yet to come in the future without taking any efforts. Indeed, if a person is doing an unsatisfactory job, they fear that crying over it will make them lose their employment. Even though the working hours are long, heavy workload and low pay, they believe that this job will help them to support their family expenses. For instance, most of the middle-class families are adjusting to all the circumstances which they face in their daily lives and also teaching the same to their children. On the other hand, changing the set of circumstances is very difficult, but possible, because humans have the capacity to make any situation turn upside down. Moreover, they might face troubles at the beginning, but eventually they will taste the flavour of success. For example, my friend was working in a start-up company for a low salary and faced heavy work pressure, but she wanted to modify her state, so she started attending interviews in other global and MNC’s. Initially she had faced a lot of struggles, but finally she got an offer in an MNC with a good hike and she is very happy. To conclude, we must “fight tooth and nail” to achieve our goals and turn our situations better rather than just accepting our fate, because our lives must be a role model to the younger generation.
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in certain circumstances, whereas others believe that such
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improved
through our efforts. In my viewpoint, I would suggest that a person should work
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and enhance the
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situations
rather
than getting habitual to the things.

On one hand,
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always try to accept
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bad
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, thinking that the
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times are
yet
to
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come
in the future without taking any efforts.
Indeed
, if a person is doing an unsatisfactory job, they fear that crying over it will
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make
them lose their employment.
Even though
the working hours are long, heavy workload and low pay, they believe that this job will
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help
them to support their family expenses.
For instance
, most of the middle-
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families are adjusting to all the circumstances which they face in their daily
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lives
and
also
teaching the same to their children.

On the other hand
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possible,
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humans have the capacity to
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any
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turn upside down.
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, they might face troubles at the beginning,
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eventually
they will taste the
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flavour
of success.
For example
, my friend was working in a
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start
-up
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company
for a low salary and faced heavy work pressure,
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but
she wanted to modify her state,
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so
she
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started
attending interviews in other global and
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’s.
Initially
she had faced
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a lot of
struggles,
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finally
she
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got
an offer in an
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MNC
with a
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good
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hike and
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happy.

To conclude
, we
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must
“fight tooth and nail” to achieve our goals and turn our
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better
rather
than
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accepting our fate,
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our
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be a role model to the younger generation.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 143 v. 67

Essay
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4 paragraphs
289 words
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